It is evident that
eating food has far reaching implications for our lives in the contemporary
society. Some people might be in favor of eating out, while others do not. In
my opinion, however, I agree with this statement. There are a number of the
cogent reasons to support my argument, but I mainly focus on the two most
crucial ones. First, eating out food food made
outside is very dirty. In addition, eating out food is mostly
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To begin with, the
most significant reason for my argument is that eating out food food prepared outside is really dirty more dirtier than eating homemade food. Eating
out food Food made outside does not tend
to wash well. Let’s
take my friend Tom, whom I went to college with, for example. He was work
worked in restaurants. His part was washing
job was to wash vegetables. Most staff was not
washing vegetables well. He felt that restaurants food was mostly dirty.
To second, but
equally important reasons for arguing in this way is that eating out food
is very expensive. Eating out food is mostly usually costly than eating homemade food. <mostly라는 단어가 계속 나오네요. 유의어를 사용해주세요~> Let’s take my friend Tommy
<여자의 이름이 나와야
되지 않을까요?>, whom I went to college with, for example. She lived in a dormitory. Thus, she mostly cooked food in dorm.
When, she ate food in dorm, food price was lower. One day, she went to restaurants
with her friends. But, food price was very expensive. She felt that eating
out food was very more expensive
more than eating homemade food.
All things
considered, with the reasons mentioned above, I firmly believe that my
argument regarding this topic has been clearly and precisely delivered. Never
should we forget that this issue may have huge impacts on our future.
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