▶ Your Answer :
In the
lecture, the lecturer argues that home-schooling is an the effective
type of education. He said that home-schooling system shows the successful result of education in the
North America: it covers all the curriculum and helps students to be mature and
active.
First, unlike an assertion in reading passage, differnetly from the text, the lecturer said that children who took an education at home are as well educated as
students studying at school home-schooled students are well educated as the students of
public school. In North America, most of
students who homeschooling students are covered all over
necessaries for their education. Moreover, the opportunity of choosing the
subjects according to student's interests intrests leads them to
get higher notes, and it makes it easier to get success. Home-schooling is more successful and effective/higher learning leraning skill of education. Thus, the lecturer lecutrer reputes the reading passage's arguments that home-schooling does not cover the curriculum.
Second, home-schooling gives takes more benefits than the regular system of education. As home-schooling students spend most of
their time with adults, this fact makes them be more mature. They do not have
any problem with social skills(,) because of their activity in the social clubs
and the sports; therefore, they are more active, socialized, confident and
mature than the ordinary students who take
regular education at school regular
students of public schools. In fact,
this point counters the reading passage's assertion argument that home-schooling creates the home-schooled student's
social risks.
글 전반적으로 lecture 내용에 지나치게 집중되어 있습니다. reading 에서 말하는 내용도 적절하게 섞어주시면 비교/대조가 더 뚜렷하게 이루어질 수 있을 것 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다 :) |