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In the real life, the relationship itself is very
important because we are living together(.) and so it is in relationship between same with teachers and students. They are socially
correlated each other which meansing that they live
together as bounded. Thus, it’s important for both teachers and students to have
good well relationship. Teachers in the past
they were absolute being. However, their existence had been changed over
time. Now they are a mentor, protector and friend in some cases. They hear student’s voice and they even fight for
them. There is this issue that a teacher’s ability to relate well with
students is more important than to give them knowledge. I certainly agree with the
statement with three/ 3 specific reasons.
First, teachers, as a mentor and protector, they
should maintain a good relationship with students to help them (to) live their
own life. Teachers are one of the most important people in student’s life.
Their words and action may lead student in a wrong way. They should try their
best to see and understand students with the view of students’ but not theirs.
And for that they should keep close to their students.
Second, a teacher who does not have doesn’t has amicable relationship with students would
have a lot of difficulties with having a class. There are usually two 2 types of classes in school. One is a funny and popular
class and the other one is boring and unpopular class. The former is usually handled by teacher the one who has fine relationship with students and the latter
must be the one who is in got poor relationship with students.
All the students hate to attend the class which is taught by teacher who has no relationship with them at all the teacher’s not good. That’s just natural reaction of for students(’). And it that also proves that the relationship between student and teacher is
important.
Third, it is a duty for teacher to have an amicable
relationship with students. As I mentioned at the first time, having a good
relationship is very important for both to teachers and students. They both
get the guarantees by helping each other.
These are the three reasons why I agree with the
statement. First, teachers, as a mentor and protector, they should
maintain a good relationship with students to help them (to) live their own
life. Second, a teacher who does not have amicable relationship with student
would have a lot of difficulties with managing/ having a class. And lastly, the last is it is a duty for teachers to have an amicable relationship with
students.
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