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Most Koreans today are so obsessed with education that some people even think television programs should be made for education, too. However, the truth is that majority of people watch TV as a way of entertainment, not education. This is because people from a wide range of age group, from such as pre-school children to grandparents who are in 80s and 80 years old grandparent grandpa, are watching TV. (students who are watching TV for learning are 20percent of total number of viewers. 이런식으로 간단하게 쓸 수도 있을 것 같습니다.) For this reason, I believe that it is absurd to say that the purpose of TV should be for education rather than entertainment(,) because there will be nothing to talk about without daily TV shows(,) and watching television for fun gives a great way to reduce stress level and have a relax time.
First of all, watching TV shows entertaining TV show often plays a great role in building everyday relationship with people. In particular, the topic of most of daily conversation come from is one way or another related to contents that TV programs released from TV shows, ranging from celebrity gossips to guest of last night show (대화의 topic 범위가 좁아보입니다. 정치나 사회 관련 이야기부터 연예인들 이야기까지 이런식으로 넓게 잡는 것이 좋겠습니다.) who was on the last night late show. According to a statistic released conducted by Seoul National University, about 80 percent of people said that they mostly talk about TV shows they watched with their friends. This implies what a profound influence TV programs entertainment has on our society. Without the basic knowledge of popular shows that is going on, it is hard to follow the trend and conversation with others.
Moreover, fun TV shows gives great way to recharge the drained energy from work and school. People get tremendous amount of stress every day from overwhelming loads of work. However, while watching TV, people forget about everything and solely focus on funny and exciting shows on TV, and they also enjoy time to relax relaxing with families and friends in front of the TV screen. To be specific, my family watches Korean comedy show called 'Infinity Challenge,' and it is the only time of a day when all of the family members gather in one place and mingle with one another. In the process, I catch up with their daily lives and have wonderful time laughing together. (굳이 나누실 필요 없이 한번에 깔끔하게 쓰실 수 있을 것 같습니다!!! ^^) If there were not entertainment show for my family, it would be much harder for me to find a way to have fun with them and relieve stress at the same time. (어떻게보면 stress 를 푸는 것과 가족들과 시간을 보내는 두가지의 내용이 한 문단에 mix 되면서 글이 한 방향으로 흐르고 있지 못하다는 생각이 듭니다. 분명한 근거를 정하셔서 정확하게 그것이 보일 수 있도록 글을 다시 구성해보시면 좋겠습니다.)
To sum up, TV shows aimed for entertainment provide people with topics to converse with others about and with chance to be rejuvenated by releasing stress rejuvenating chance to relax with others. For these reasons, I strongly disagree with the premise that TV should be made for education rather than entertainment.
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