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Nowadays, it is debatable whether newspapers are a better source of information than TV or not. Some people might think that the newspaper is much better source of information than the television(,) because most of them are really reliable. But I have a different idea. When it comes to the statement that the television is a better source of information than the newspaper, (이런 부분들을 굳이 쓰지 않아도 충분히 자신의 입장을 표현할 수 있을 거라는 생각이 듭니다. 이미 이 앞문장에서도 I have different idea 라고 clear 하게 서술하시기도 하셨구요~) I definitely agree with it. I have two specific reasons to support my opinion. The television provides lots of information to us and also it is easy to understand what they are trying to say.
To begin with, I strongly believe that the television is better than the newspaper. This is mainly because when we watch the television we can see there is lots of information. Also, we can enjoy watching variety of the channels and the amount of information is always updated every seconds (구체적으로 이번 문단에서 focus on 하고 싶으신 것은 무엇인가요? 다양한 채널인가요? 많은 정보인가요? 아니면 최신 소식인가요?) Therefore, many people can watch the programs that they want to see. As they watch lots of advertisements, people can get exact information of the product and can determine which one is better than others. For example, I can easily know when the new products are coming out. The reason is that the television commercials show/ advertises the new products quicker than any other media. The advertisement shows clearly about the products and it explains short for 30s-1 minutes, but it is very clear to get information. Therefore, I can make a clear decision when I buy the products from watching the advertisement. The reason that people enjoy watching them is because of the quick updated. From this experience, we can get the information easily and quickly rather than any other device. (역시나 처음intro 에서의 계획이 그대로 진행되지 못했습니다. 인트로에서는 첫 문단에서 “많은 정보”를 강조하려 했지만 그 보다는 광고 혹은 빠른 전달에 초점이 맞춰졌네요..)
The other thing is that the television makes people understand something clearly. As a matter of fact, the television offers visually enhanced information like graphic. They make us understand the things much quicker. Furthermore, listening what they are saying on the television is much quicker and faster than reading the newspaper. (신속성은 이번 문단에서 굳이 언급하실 필요가 없는 사항인 것 같습니다.) When we read a the newspaper, it takes long time to finish reading all sections of newspaper read whole passage and if we do not focus on them at the moment, it is impossible to understand whole of them. Also, the newspaper makes the older have a problem to read. The size of fonts is points are very small to read so there are some people who cannot read to have a problem for reading the newspapers. (it is unreadable for some people due to small size of fonts 이렇게 간단하게 쓸 수도 있습니다.) However, the television delivers messages in oral rather than texts offers more oral than reading, so it is much better. To clarify, I cite an instance that when I watch the educational programs on the television, I can clearly understand what they are saying. The teachers teach the students in detail, so it helps me a lot when I have a problem for solving questions. However, I saw one of the newspapers which were related with the education. When I read them, I was having difficulty with solving several questions(,) because the newspapers do not have a function to explain and give visual effect. As seen above, the newspapers have several disadvantages in our daily life.
In conclusion, I totally agree with this statement saying that the television is a better source of information than the newspapers. As I mentioned above, it is one of the media to update faster and also it has a visual effect to make people understand quicker. For those reasons, I believe that the television is better media than the newspapers.
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