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I believe (that) having/accumulating experience is better than reading a book to gain knowledge. Because, basically, reading book is kind of experience. (?)That is to say, experience is more bigger concept than reading book, and book cannot substitute experience. Reading a book is part of experience, while experience cannot be a part of reading a book. (뭐, 이런 말을 전달하고 싶으셨나요?) Even though we can learn from reading, we can learn more from experiencing it Though we can be learned to reading, we can't learn more experience. It is not real, it is just image. (it 이 뭔가요? Reading 이면 reading 이라고 써주세요)
Knowledge gained from experiencing is real and vivid. However, experience is real. Therefore we can feel vivid. Before I visited Africa, all things that I knew was not unique but simple before I went to Africa, I just know a dictionary knowledge about Africa, But, when I sent to Africa, I experienced its city, safari, weather and animal and so on. (food 나 문화 같은 것도 강조하면 좋을 것 같습니다.) After I went to Africa, I got a lot of experience about Africa: city,desert, safari, climate, animal, etc, and then I totally understood understand the country a Africa concept. Although people Tough People can get knowledge from books about Africa to reading book, they can't feel sunshine(,) and can't scent wind, can't and see the beautiful scenery.
Lastly, reading is part of experience. reading also is experience. People can experience through consist of five senses: sight, smell, hearing, taste, and touch, so reading can't compare with experience. Not only experience be used when we learn, but also experience be used throughout our life. Our life is accumulation of experience.
Books teach us a lot, but there is a limit to what they teach. They can give us information or show us another person's experiences. These are valuable things, but the lessons we learn from our own experiences: sight, smell, hearing, taste, and touch. (아직 문장 완성 안됐습니다..) I prefer experience to get knowledge rather than reading book gained to book.
개선하셔야 할 부분들이 많습니다 – 글의 흐름, 내용전개, 문장 구성. 일단은 문장을 구성하시는 것이 가장 우선되어야 겠습니다. 수고하셨습니다~ |