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There is a controversy about judgment judgement of a person based on the first impression. Some people say that first impressions is the most important factor to judge the person. However, in my point of view, quickly judging a person's character holds various disadvantages.
To begin with, relying on the first impression might cause misunderstanding to miss a person's true character. The first impression reflects/is just only a little part of the person's whole personality. (이게 supportive sentence 인가요? 이어지는 문장에서 이 내용을 잘 보충설명 살 수 있도록 해주세요~) Because we tend to focus on personal aspects that only we can easily observe, we do not carefully see a person's character with details such as behaviors or way of thinking. This tendency makes them difficult to properly percept other people. For example, in a job interview, interviewers have only few minutes to communicate with the applicants. For During that short time, most of interviewers quickly judge a person's personality and potentiality/ possibility. In order to solve this drawback of job interview system, now a number of companies introduce internship program to better understand the applicant's character. (첫 인상이 한 사람의 일부분만을 보여주기 때문에 그 사람에 대해 오해하게 되거나 하는 내용들을 구체적으로 살려주셔야 할 것 같습니다.)
On top of that, judging a person based judgement on first impression may cause people too much focus on people's appearance. (why do you think so? 아니면 첫 문장을 조금 더 크게 잡아서 성형 붐이 일어난 한국의 모습을 이야기해도 좋겠네요~) When we meet a new person, what makes one’s consists the first impression is the person's appearance. If we focus on only the first image in a short time, people will be more likely to have better see outer appearance, ignoring inner beauty. Concerning too much about appearance has been a form of social problem. In these days, a number of people try to get a plastic surgery because they want to give good impression to others with better appearance. However, this trend negatively affects proper human relationships. People excessively pay attention to other's appearance regardless whatever the person's personality is.
Lastly, it may also negatively affect my personal image. (why?) If I quickly judge a person without careful thought, he or she also might judge me as a careless person. In order to give good impression to others, we need to judge a person after careful consideration. Sometimes, this hasty judgment judgement harms a person's reputation. For example, when I was in college, one of my classmates made his friends only by looking first impressions. At first, I thought his human network was quite wide/ broad, however, many people blamed his attitude, which is carelessly making friends without any consideration.
To sum up, judging judgement a person based on the first impressions does not help us at all. It not only makes us ignore the true personality, but also badly influence our proper human relationships. In this regard, I firmly believe that relying on the first impressions is not appropriate to judge a person's character.
일단 스펠링 주의해주세요. 처음부터 끝까지 judgment 스펠링 틀리셨습니다. 실수라고 하기 좀 애매한 부분이네요. 그리고 supportive sentence 가 잘 드러나지 않습니다. Clear 하게 써주셔야 이어지는 내용의 흐름을 쉽게 잡으실 수 있을 것 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다~ |