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The reading passage contends that solar energy is a promising alternative source. On the other hand the lecturer brings up several points that contradict this argument.
First, the speaker argues that solar energy is not eco-friendly environmentally friendly. One significant reason is that it has to install solar panel which takes up much of a land. For example if it is installed in New-York city, it has to use more than 25% of land to install the panel. Therefore it is not efficient and even damages environment. This casts doubt on the reading, which states that counters that solar energy does not destroy the environment. (reading 내용 보충해주세요. 어떤 이유로 환경을 해치지 않는다고 주장하고 있는 것인지 분명하게 서술해주세요.)
Second, according to the lecturer, in order to store the energy, people must use battery. The material to make battery is rare. For example, the lead. (흐름이 부자연스럽습니다, material 이 rare 하다는 것의 예인가요?) This refutes the reading passage's assertion that the resource (of what?) is plentiful. (point 는 있으나 문장별 연결/흐름이 자연스럽거나 매끄럽지 못합니다. Reading 의 내용 여전히 부족합니다. 보충해주세요.)
The final points made by the lecturer is that it is inconvenient to repair (what? 이 정보가 없네요..) if it is installed in distant area located in remote area is not convenient to repair. What's more, to maintain solar system needs high technology. This counters the writer's claim that it is not difficult to collect solar energy even in rural area/remote place (이 의미를 전달하고 싶으셨나요?) solar energy can work in remote area thus it has a lot of benefits.
전반적으로 point 는 잘 드러나고 있으나 연결이 매끄럽지 못합니다. 양쪽 입장이 주장하는 바를 드러내실 때는 원인과 그에 따른 결과가 뚜렷하게 드러날 수 있도록 서술해주시길 바라며 전체적으로 reading 의 내용이 부족하지 보충해주세요. 수고하셨습니다. |