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The reading passage contends that it is impossible for Greek to use mirrors to project sun rays which caused enemy ships to combust in a sea battle. On the other hand the lecturer brings up several points that contradict this argument.
First the speaker argues that although, technology not existent for one big curved mirror, possibly using multiple sheets of reflective glass, putting together to create parabola shape. (무슨 내용인지.,. 의미 전달이 제대로 안됩니다. 불필요한 콤마가 있다면 지워주시고요~동사를 정확하게 써주세요. Technology 가 주어인 것 같은데 동사는 없네요..) This casts doubt on the reading which states that technology (어떤 technology 를 말하시는 건가요? 아마도 이 부분이 speaker 설명할 때 제시되었어야 하는 부분 같은데 clear 하게 안나왔던 것 같구요.) could not have existed. Geometry involved includes parabola shape which not used till much later. (갑자기 geometry 가 나오는 이유는 무엇인가요? 문장끼리의 연결고리가 제대로 표현되지 않아서 reading 의 입장이 제대로 정리되질 않습니다.ㅠㅠ)
Second, according to the lecturer, it is not required to be stationary if the weapon itself was able to rotate and follow trajectory of ship. Moreover if it is powerful enough, it wouldn't even take 10 minutes (뭐하는데 10분도 채 안걸린다는건가요?) minuets. This refutes the reading passage's assertion that even with a glass, takes time to cause combustion. (even it—무엇인가가 glass 로 만들어진 것을 의미하는 것인 것 같은데.. 그 무엇이 뭔지를 모르겠네요..-- takes time to be completely combusted ß 이 의미가 맞나요?) For a whole ship to burst into flames, at least 10 minuet. It takes at least 10 minutes for an entire ship to be burnt (<- 이 의미인가요?) Therefore ship would have to be stationary which would not happen in battle.
The final points (제가 본 ee님의 글 전부에서 final points 라는 복수형태를 사용하시는데 point! 라고 써주시길 바랍니다.) made by the lecturer is that fiery arrows possibly be also used but at lesser range. Reflected beam could traverse wider distances than the arc of arrows. This counters the writer's claim that Greeks already had use of fiery arrows which would have been more effective in causing fires in multiple areas rather than one specific point.
그나마 마지막 문단이 조금 clear 하긴 합니다만, 전반적으로 의미전달이 제대로 이루어지지 않으니 문장 구성하는 연습 꾸준히 해주시길 바랍니다. 수고하셨습니다. |