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Steve jobs, Bill Gates, Tim Cook, J.K. Rolling and so on... There are ample amount numbers of famous people who achieved their dream such as Steve jobs, Bill Gates, Tim Cook, J.K. Rolling and so on. 는 ‘양’을 표현할 때 사용됩니다 ^^> In the 21st century, there are some people who are outstanding in their field and these people quite interestingly have a few characteristics in common. In this passage, I will discuss two main characteristics of these eminent people : Adventurous attitude and bold mind to take risks.
First of all, people who achieved their aims/goals have adventurous attitude. why do you think so? 성공한 사람들을 보면 다른 사람이 하지 않았던 영역을 개발한다던가 하는 내용이 올 수 있겠죠..? They try to explore the world more and more and this behavior makes people think more about the world. Thus, they have stupendous amount of ideas. If the person teems full of in ideas, they will stand a higher chance to get creative idea. For instance, Ki-hoon Kim, preeminent English lecturer in South Korea, <고유명사는 대문자로 써주세요 ^^> took all the lectures of English teachers in Seoul. He was striving to get efficient teaching methods from his competitors. As a result of this action, he could get the most effective and the best methods to convey English knowledge to his disciples. Not only the idea he got from his competitors but also the original teaching method that came from his pains made his success. 예시와 본인의 idea 를 종합하여 끝맺음 문장으로 써주시길 바랍니다.
Secondly, successful ones have bold mind to take risks. They do not think dangers as threat but they regard it as opportunity to develop themselves. For example, the late Steve Jobs, the former CEO of the Apple, got fired from the Apple Company when he was young. Although he was so shocked that he could not do anything for a while, he kept making himself a competitive person. He learned handwriting <무슨 뜻인지 이해가 안됩니다. 구체적으로 써주셔야 합니다.> and had a positive mind that he will be a successful person. After endeavoring persistently, he was able to establish Pixar Company. This achievement also made him to be appointed to the as Apple's CEO once again. As you can see from his story, the more a person tries to pursue better, the more possibilities that the one can be distinguished. 고유명사를 대문자로 표기해주는 것 잊지 말아주세요~ ^^
To sum up, both pioneering spirit to experience more and the boldness to take risks are essential factors for one to be foremost in nowadays. Despite the fact that there are other important factors, these two traits are more crucial than any other factors. Gone are the days when one could achieve his goal without these features.
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