To begin with,
hard work has a direct correlation with success in lifetime. This is due to the
fact that opportunities come only to people who put all their effort and time in (for) their goals. It is especially important given
that modern society is becoming increasing(ly)
competitive. Moreover, hard working people will be prepared for any kind of
situation. As a result, individuals can create success (succeed)
even if they are in difficult situations. To illustrate, Bill Gates, who was
the founder of Microsoft, made great accomplishments in his lifetime. I read online that
he was the most famous (person) in the field of
Information Technology because he invested his time as well as effort in
building computers and seized every opportunity. He did this by working
diligently for his
end. Therefore, this shows that Bill Gates' hard work resulted in his
success and hardworking people have more chances to achieve their goal. (If you clarified the example’s connection to the thesis
while writing it, there’s no need to state this once more)
(If this
is a single paragraph, you tried to cram too many points in one paragraph. You
could write instead: 1) opportunity come to those to try hard, 2) hard workers
are prepared for any kind of situation. This way, your essay would be better.)