Some people think that to study with a group is attractive for them. Other people says that to study alone is good for them. In my experience, I would choose to study alone. There are three reasons why I choose to study alone: no distraction, more concentration and more effectiveness. 간결하고 정확하게 글쓴이의 의견과 그에 따른 의견들을 제시하셨어요.
First of all, it is beneficial to be free from noisy noise that is made by your friends or a group. For example, if you like to study with your friends, some noise will not be no a problem. However, if you are sensitive, noisy circumstance makes you angry and distracts your study not having your study on their ways. Someone who feels unpleasant about it will be hindered to study hard because their mental is not calm.
In addition, the silent environment which is silent lets you concentrate powerful better. If you sit down on your chair in the a calm school library, you will much more concentrate better on your subjects. and It makes your study effectiveness higher. Consequently, high effectiveness ensures that your goal will be in success. I study hard because I want my own goal to be fulfilled. Therefore, I greatly want to study alone. 두 번째와 세 번째 이유, 두 이유 모두 further reasoning이 필요해요. 예를 들면 조용한 환경에는 방해요소가 적기 때문에 다른 것에 신경이 덜 쓰여서 집중이 잘 된다던 지 등의 이유를 붙여주세요.
Some problem-solving subjects like mathematics and physics do not necessitate the calm environment. However, prior to problem-solving, I have to understand what they mean on the paper. Furthermore, there are lots of subjects which want me to be just memorize. Therefore, for me, I would choose to study alone because of the calm environment made by being alone.
Conclusion paragraph가 조금 약한 것 같아요. 앞에서 말했던 세가지 이유와 잘 연결되는 거 같지가 않아요. Problem-solving 과 memorization이 갑자기 튀어나온 느낌이에요. 더 잘 이어주세요. 그 외에는 전체적으로 좋아요. 수고하셨습니다.