▶ Your Answer :
An
intriguing topic of discussion at hand is whether people should gather
information provided by diverse news sources. The answer to this question can
vary greatly depending on the individual perspectives. Thus, the jury may still
be out, but as far as I am concerned, I agree with the statement. Therefore, in
this essay, I will present two reasons supporting my standpoint as follows.
First of all, news sources have various information
which has have different values respectively individually. In today’s society, there
are lots of new media which have distinct characteristics and roles (respectively).
Therefore, if people can collect information they need from by using diverse news media, it will help people to be more educated.
For example, the internet deals with some events or accidents which occur in
our society every day. Also, people who use internet as a tool for getting some
information can interact with the other people online by writing some comment
below news article. So, in the process of doing this, they will have many
chances to widen their perspectives. And another source, news paper can let
reader be more active in regard of reading some articles. Therefore, it
may help people (to) build raise the ability to read some writing more precisely and concentrate
on it. As a result, if people use various new media when they need some
information, they will be able to improve themselves in lots of aspects.
Secondly, using different news sources is very
efficient. That’s because people may find some information successfully that the other source
does not have if people can’t find any information which they really need when they use one news
sources, they can use another news media and find them successfully. For example, when I had to do some research paper during
semester, I utilized the internet for it. However, I could not get any
information which I need in the internet because the information in the
internet was too unreliable. But, as an alternative, I used a certain news paper for my source paper. (그 newspaper 가 무엇인지 이름을 쓰셔도 좋겠고, 아니면 no. 1 newspaper in Korea 과 같이 부연설명을
해주시면 좋겠어요~) Finally, I got very useful
and rewarding information by reading that newspaper
which explained deeply and profoundly which
are very deep and profound in that newspaper.
In conclusion, one news resource can be replaced with another resource
if there is not enough information in that news
media.
In conclusion, I strongly argue for my standpoint
on account of the two reasons mentioned above. Once again, although the verdict
may still be out, I personally believe that two of my rationales above are
sufficiently convincing enough to represent many viewpoints of a majority of
people who are in favor of my claim.
잘 쓰셨습니다. 그런데 아쉬운 점은 설명이 길어져서 일까요? 의미가 clear 하게 전달되지 않는 부분이 좀 보였고, 굳이 서술하지 않아도 되는 부분까지도 서술하면서 글이 길어졌다는 느낌도 없지 않습니다. 간결하지만 정확하게 표현하는 것이 더 중요하다는 거 잘 알고 계시죠? J 수고하셨습니다!!! ^^ |