■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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People had been getting elder people’s advices whenever they faced variety of problems. Therefore, it is great worth to discuss whether grandparents’ advice is useful for grandchildren or not. Although some people think that grandparents’ advice is always useful as they live longer and experienced a lot more than grandchildren, I think grandparents’ advice rather cause conflict in modern society. In this essay, I will dearly show and develop what I think and why I think this way.
First of all, modern day’s grandchildren can get advices from variety of media. It does not take genius to know that unlike grandparents who had to get advices from their parents, grandparents or teachers, modern day’s students know how to get advices and information from various media that provide all sort of information from different people around the world. Therefore, modern students do not need grandparent’s advice since they can get a lot of advices from various people through the media. Here is a trust worthy research to illustrate the point. According to the KRI, the most famous research institution in Korea, 70 percent of modern day’s students get advice from internet rather than grandparents. This research demonstrates that modern day’s grandchildren are more accustomed with getting advices from media than grandparents.
Second of all, grandparents’ advices rather cause conflict between grandparents and grandchildren. Generally speaking, generation gap between grandparents and grandchildren is getting bigger and bigger as the society develops more rapidly. Grandparents’ generation had their own trend when they were young and grandchildren has very different trend as the society develop drastically. Therefore, grandparents’ good intended advice could rather cause conflict since grandparents’ perspective of world and grandchildren’s perspective of world are different. Here is my friend’s experience to clarify the point. My friend Sarah who has a lot of interest in machinery lives with her grandparents. Her grandparents’ always concern on her health since she was looking at the computer all the day. Hence, they advice her to not look at the computer too long as it is not good for health. However, she cannot understand why her grandparents always block her to develop her computer skill which is important for her to be competitive person in modern life. After several advices from her grandparents, she does not talk to her grandparents anymore. This example shows that how grandparents who have totally different perspective of the world’s advice could cause conflict.
In conclusion, I think grandparents’ advice is not useful for grandchildren. It is not only because grandchildren could get a lot of advices from the media but also grandparents who have different perspective of world’s advice could cause conflict from grandchildren. | |
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