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An ongoing debate exists over whether games can
teach us valuable lessons about life. Some people believe that games can't
teach us valuable lesson about life because games has have negative impact on people's health and makes
can't concentrate on their result to poor
concentration at works. ’t가 조동사이기 때문에, make
앞에 나와야 합니다. 그렇지만 make 자체가
이 문장에 필요가 없기 때문에 지웠습니다 ^^> I, however, am against the
opinion that games can't teach valuable lessons about life to us.
<이
부분이 좀 This is largely because people can learning learn to cooperating
cooperate with others and also cam understand
the rule. <이 부분이 이해되지 않습니다;; 확인해주세요>
To begin with, people can learning learn how to cooperate with others. <조동사+동사
원형이 정확한 패턴입니다> It' It
is no secret that cooperation is one of the important considerations in human's
life. During the playing the games, people have to cooperate with
others to win the game. They can accept cooperation with others with ease. According to a study conducted by
team of researchers at the Harvard University,
people who play games with others have more ability to cooperate with others
and when they work on, conflicts are less than people, who doesn't
don’t play the
games. Therefore,
people can learn cooperating to cooperate
with others while playing games.
On top of that, people can understand the
importance of the rule and accept that they can't treat the things on
their way without the rules. There ate many rules in the
games. People have to follow the rules. In the case that loosing losing in the game because they don't follow the
rules, they can learn important of the rules. Also, They understand the life that they can't deal and get the
all the things what they want. For instance, my little cousin was
did all things on his way. But However 으로 문장을 시작하지 말고,
but말고 다른 유의어를 사용해서 문장을 시작해주세요> after playing the games, now, he
can understand that he can't do all things on
his ways and he have has to follow the
rules.
To summarize, games can teach us valuable lessons
about life on the grounds that people can learn cooperating others and they
understand the important of the rules. Some
people say that games has have negative
impact on the humans, but it cannot exceed the important role of the games.
좀 더 이유를 구체적으로 타당하게 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다 ^^ 수고하세요~ |