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With a quick and great development of
technologies, it became easier and more comfortable to use Internet
than ever. In addition, the usage of the Internet is diverse. When it comes to studying
study <굳이
이 부분에서 동명사를 쓰실 필요는 없을 것 같습니다. Study는 동사이기도 하고 명사이기도 합니다> with using the
Internet, I'm
absolutely in favor of the idea that students can learn more effectively with
the help of it. I'd like to represent my two supporting reasons. <반대되는 아이디어를 넣어주면 더 좋을 것 같아요. 비교하면서
더 쉽게 이해 할 수 있을 것 같습니다>
First, not like books or other reading materials that
are commonly used for studying, the Internet can offer sound system and diverse
images or playing. Therefore, studetns students can
take advantage of them that which are
available only by the Internet. Take my personal experience as an
illustration, when I was in school days, I wanted to improve my English ability and put much time and efforts into it.
However, it was not easy to be competent with
other lauguage language. Especially, I had difficulty in
memorizing English
vacabularies vocabularies. So, onday
one day, I used the Internet dicionary dictionary and not only I
could I listen the sound of it but also I
was able to see the images of it, which was engraved in my brain right away and
lingered for a long
time. By
doing so, it became much
easier for me to memorize words. In this regard, Internet defenietly definitely helps studetns students study.
Second, since we have an easy access to the Internet
nowadays, we
can get on
the Internet anytime anywhere. And this results in saving a great amout amount of time for students. For illustration, once one time, my friend and I went to Kyung Bok palace <경복궁은 고유명사이기 때문에, 대문자를 써주세요>, Korean traditional palace that has been kept as a
site of traveling. My friend was Japanese, so I had to explain everything to
her. However I encountered a wall of limitation, since I had only little
background or information of it. So again, I
used Internet to search for the palace. And and
eventually, I could explain it to my friend. It would have been inconvinient
inconvenient, If if
I had to go to the library to look for the information about this. In this
sense, Internet helps students be satisfied with learning since there is no
limitation of place or time for it. <굳이 … of it, …
for it 이라고 표현하실 필요는 없습니다>
To conclude, I strongly agree that the
Internet increased the effectiveness of studying for students. It's beneficial
not only because they can utilize many functions that the Internet serves, but
also they can study anytime anywhere.
대체적으로 잘 쓰신 것 같습니다. 스펠링 에러만 빼면 더 좋았을 것 같네요 ^^ 수고하세요! |