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There is an argument over whether the decisions that people make quickly are always wrong. Some people say that people should decide everything considerately because we are able to reduce our mistakes. I, however, am of the opinion that it is too narrow perspective about decision. This is largely because there are a lot of decisions which are hard to justify right or wrong. Moreover, we could have situations that earlier decision makes good result.
To begin with, we are living in a very complicated society. There can be myriad of situations where we should decide. Also, there are lots of fields in our society. Thus, it is too hard to describe which decision is right or wrong. Each person has diffierent perspective about various issues. For example, in Korea, there are lots of discussions about enforcing a law. This law is about forcing children to use the internet before 10 p.m. Some people said that using too much internet could give negative effects on children in their studies. Because of this , so so는 에쎼이에서 쓰지 말아주세요.) we should restict using the internet. In contrast, another other (other + 복수명서) people said that it is important to students to use the internet for searching a lot of informations about study and homework. In this situation, we cannot say easily which decision is right or wrong.
On top of that, we have some kind of situations that faster decision should be made. Decide deciding (ing 로써주세요 동사가 맨앞이면 명령문입니다.) slowly is not always good. In my case, when I was eleven years old, I and my friend Kyung-soo were playing baseball each other. Later on, I hit the ball thrown by Kyung-soo and that ball hit my friend's nose. He blooded too much that I got embarassed so much. And then, I made a decision to call a security guard (이부분에 대해서 좀더 detail하게 써주시면 좋겠습니다. 왜 이게 가장 좋은 decision인지에 대해서 supporing idea넣어주세요. around there because I had not cell phone that day. Thanks to my quickly decision, he could prevent avoid serious injury.
All in all, it is good for people to decide considerably. it can prevent a lot of mistakes came from decisions. However, Saying those decisions are always correct is firmly speculation. This is because we can face diverse situations which are hard to say right or wrong in decision. Also, there can be situations that eariler decisions are needed. For these reasons, it seems evident that quickly decision is always wrong is not correct.
Comment: 두번째 본론이 좀 짧네요..ㅎㅎ 좀더 길게써주시면 좋겠습니다. 최소한 결론과 서론보다는 길게써주시는게 정말중요합니다. 안그러면 감점요인에 속하게 되지요. 위에 참고해주시고요. 수고하셨습니다. |