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In this set of materials, both the reading passage and the lecture deal with the U.S individual income tax policy. Regarding this topic, the lecturer argues that the policy was unnecassary because it did not last for long time. Also, there are three reasons about the unsucessful tax policy. This contradicts the writer's opinion that U.S tax policy was very successful.
First of all, According to the lecture, the policy of tax did not cover all aspects in society. Actually, the funds that cover (관계대명사이므로 ㅎㅎ) covering the war was only three percents. However, the other taxes were high for tarrifs. So, Therefore, (에쎄이에서는 so but 써주지마세요.) it was unnessary. This counters the writer's assertion that America raised funds to cover the cost of war.
Moreover, the lecturer goes on to say that, the tax was dicriminating (형용사로 써주시는게 맞다고생각합니다.) for upper class. For upper class in U.S, government's tax policy was a punishment for their achived success and it was not suitable for its purpose of the democracy. This refutes the writer's viewpoint that the tax policy was effective because it gives fairness to the citizens and it reduced burden about taxes to poor people.
Lastly, the lecturer maintains that the policy was inappropriate for its excessive power of governments. The government's power about tax was too excessive and it was strong-arm tactics to the citizens. This point challenges that the policy was effective because the government could control all the taxes through its core system. (이포인트 정말 잘쓰신 것 같아요 ㅋㅋㅋㅋ )
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