■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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If you need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, using e-mail or text is better than using telephone or voice messages.
In modern society, people can argue about any problems with text message or telephone although disputant is far from them. Therefore it is great worth to discuss whether it is better to discuss upsetting problem with others, using e-mail than using telephone or voice messages. Some people might think that arguing with telephone or voice message is best for them to express their emotion and opinion, but I think text message or e-mail are better than telephone to argue about upsetting problems. In this essay, I will dearly show and develop what I think and why I think this way.
First of all, voice message or telephone which transmits people’s voice tone directly to other people could make disputant to feel bad about people’s arguing behavior. Generally speaking, when people upset or angry about some problem, they could easily lose their temper and sometimes scream about the argument. This natural behavior can make disputant to feel bad and might make him lose his temper too. Here is my personal experience to illustrate the point. My MP3 player got broken just after several days after I made purchase. I was upset about the situation and call the customer service center to argue about the problem. However, I could not get ant refund or guarantee since I was so upset that I didn’t explain specific situation but just scream at the service men. He got upset too and didn’t make any solution to my problem. This example shows how voice message can make people to be impolite to each other while they are arguing and bring disadvantage to people who make argument about the problem.
Secondly, I can deliver my point in organize manner with text message or e-mail. In general, when people argue about some problems, they can easily be upset and angry so they would not organize their points and just spoke away how they feel about the problem. However, with the text message or e-mail, people can think twice of their thought and deliver their thought in organize manner which is more appealing to the disputant. Here is a trust worthy research to clarify the topic, According to the KRI, the most famous research institution in Korea, 70 percent of people are said that they can organize their thought very well when they write down it on a paper. This can demonstrate that how text message or e-mail could help people to summarize and organize their point in appealing manner to the disputant.
In conclusion, I think it is better for people to argue about upsetting problem with text message or e-mail. It is not only because argument in voice call could make unnecessary controversial in impolite manner but it is also because that the text message or e-mail can help people to organize their thought and point and explain it systematically. Therefore I think the best way for people to argue about upsetting problem is to use text or e-mail. | |
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