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Modern society's students get more and more challenging tasks and requirement from their schools as they need a lot of knowledge to be competitive person in modern society. Therefore, it is great worth to discuss whether students should ask help about their school work to their friend who has much information on the task or professional tutor. Although some people think that students need to ask help (about tasks that they are having a hard time) to the professional tutors as they can professionally teach students, I think asking help to friend who has have much information about the tasks brings several advantages to students over asking help from professional tutor. In this essay, I will dearly show and develop what I think and why I think this way.
First of all, asking help from friend would make students to become independent and make them to get through another similar task easily by themselves. (왜요? 왜 independent 할 수 있다고 하시는 건가요? 그 이유를 간략하게 설명해주세요~) Generally speaking, if students get help from their friend, they discuss and try to understand the tasks completely since they need brief understanding of requirement to complete the tasks perfectly. However, getting a help from professional tutors who have a lot of knowledge about how to teach students easily and professionally would rather make students to depend on them since they can offer all information and analysis which are need to complete school requirement students do not need to struggle to understand about the school's requirements with professional discussion and analyzes from the tutor. Here is my friend's experience to illustrate the point. My friend, Sarah, got constant tutoring whenever she got challenging tasks from the professor. Her tutor analyzed about the tasks briefly to help her to complete the school tasks with high grade. However, when she became senior, she could not get help from her professional tutor anymore since that research should be strictly done by her. She got confused and could not even understand the tasks and should have to postpone the graduation. If she has gotten help from her friends and completed the tasks by herself, she would graduate on time but because of the tutor’s professional help, she has to postpone the graduation. (친구들에게 물어볼 경우에는 independent 하게 배울 수 있는데 구체적으로 어떤 방식으로 그렇게 될 수 있는지에 대한 언급이나 예가 없습니다.)
Secondly, students can get help from their friends without any financial burden. (왜죠? 친구들끼리는 돈이라는 보수가 없어도 충분히 도와줄 수 있다 등의 이유가 있을 수 있겠죠?) In general, modern day’s students should have to pay high amount of money to get tutoring from professional tutor because of the society’s demand for high quality education and professional tutor. However, if students ask about school work to their friend who has much knowledge about it, they do not need to spend lots of money and would not have to suffer from financial burden they faced while study by doing part time job. Here is a trust worthy research to clarify the point. According to the KRI, the most famous research institution in Korea, 70 percent of universities students are suffering from by financial burden and shouldering it by from the high cost of tutoring fee by doing part time jobs. This research demonstrates how helpful friends are in lessening financial burden and concentrating more on studying asking friend’s help with doing school work would reduce student’s financial burden and help students to solely concentrate on their school tasks.
In conclusion, I think students should ask help about their school tasks to their friends rather than professional tutor. This is not only because they can be independent on doing the school work without professional tutor but also because it would ease student’s financial burden and help them to concentrate solely on in studying better. Therefore, I would suggest students to get advice from their friends on doing their school work.
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