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Some people may believe that having a large number of friends enrichesheir lives and gives has much more advantages than hanging out with a few close friends. However, after some reflection, it is obvious that having a small number of close friends is more beneficial for people because spending time with one or two close friends enhances the friendships and it is easier to share sensitive stories with them.
To begin with, it gives people great opportunity to make deeper friendships/ deepen their friendships by hanging out with fewer numbers of friends. This is largely because people do not have to waste their precious time with friends they do not have strong relationship with. People can save the time people saved by avoiding hanging out with many friends allows people to and rather strengthen the friendship with someone they like. To illustrate this point, when I was a senior in high school, I had to spend a significant amount of time (on) studying for the college entrance exam. Due to the lack of time, I had to give up my free time which I used to spend with numerous friends, but had to hang out with just two close friends. However, I surprisingly experienced a surprisingly unexpected result that I could feel more secure with two close friends and I realized that finally I found the life time friends in my life. Thereafter, those two and I have started to build building the strongest friendships. Even They are still my best friends. (예시로 끝내지 마시고 이것과 처음 두 문장에 언급하신 내용들을 종합하셔서 끝맺음해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다)
In addition, having a few fewer close friends is are better for sharing personal issues and stories. This is evident when one ponders that people do not have to concern that their secret would be kept among their a few close friends. (무슨 말인가요? 문장이 정확하게 이해가 안되네요. When one ponders~ 로 이어지는 부분이 어디까지인가요? 정확하게 다시 한 번 써주시면 좋을 것 같네요) According to numerous studies and articles, people tend to open their minds when they are with less than five close friends. That is, people become braver and more intimate toward others in a small group. In this sense, spending time with one or two best friends provide people with better atmosphere for them to talk about their problems and secrets which they truly want to share for. As a result, people would be happier with a small number of friends by sharing their thoughts and ideas.
To conclude, I definitely would choose to associate with two close friends at the most rather than having a big group of people. The rationale behind this is that I would have better opportunity to deepen my friendships with best friends. On top of that, I absolutely would feel free to talk about my personal issues with fewer friends.
(어느 정도의 표현력도 있으시고 전반적인 흐름도 괜찮습니다. 중간중간 comment 해 드린 부분들 한 번 더 점검해보시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다! J) |