■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :Colleges and Universities must do a better
job preparing students for their workplace.
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▶ Your Answer :
Some
people say that higher education institutes must give their students job
preparing program for their future workplace. However, I strongly believe that
doing a job preparing is not colleges and universities’ first place duty at
all. Because the institutes’ purpose is to make their students study more
deeply, and colleges and universities are place for students to have diverse
experiences, not job preparing. To
be specific, a very fundamental purpose of colleges and universities is giving
their students deep and challengeable academic experience. In the current
world, people are required to have a wide variety of knowledge rather than prepare
solely for future job. The institutes such as colleges and universities
technically exist for this reason. These make students study harder and be an
‘elites’ in our society. For example, there was a survey conducted by a group
of higher education majors, with 200 citizens as respondents. The purpose of
this survey was to define what citizens regard university as. Results show (주어 동사 불일치) that most respondents replied that university is a place for learning and
studying to make our society even better, not just job preparing span. This
survey proved that higher education institutes should be academic
organizations. Second
reason is that colleges and universities’ students should have diverse and
unexpected experiences when they are in that status, students. Experience is
one of the most essential factors to succeed in this world. Imagine students
only prepare seeking job during their university life. Their views will be so
narrow when dealing with lots of diverse trouble. By attaining a myriad of
experiences, students cannot only gain diverse experiences (단수/복수) but also broaden
their horizons of the world as well, before entering the labor market. For
instance, when I was freshman in university, I was ‘not-study-hard’ type of
student. Back then, all I did was debating about not important issue to get a
job such as contemporary poem or important role of current world’s musicians
all day long. Also, I never went to my class at all and got two F grades (학점 / 사실 failed two subjects 라고 쓰는 것이 훨씬 더 자연스럽기는 합니다). But
when I became a (관사 필요합니다) senior, I realized importance of studying and learning in
academic institutes and studied as hard as I could. When I graduated my
university, I was surprised of how my diverse and exciting experiences affect (단/복수) my
inner growth. I felt I was becoming a totally different person compared to my
fresh man year.
To
sum up, there are some reasons that colleges and universities do not (줄임말 사용을 지양해주세요) have to do
a job preparing for their students. First reason is that job preparing is not
their first duty. (새로운 문장으로 시작해주세요.) second reason is that students should have diverse experience
when they are students. Therefore, I assuredly disagree with the statement that higher
education institutes must do a better job preparing students for their
workplace. |
1. 문장의 시작을 because로 하지 말아주세요! |
2. I felt I was becoming a totally different person compared to my fresh man year.
는 좋습니다. 하지만 문제는 그 달라진 점이 무엇인지를 설명하지 못하고 있다는 점입니다.
앞에 예시 분량을 좀 줄여서라도 달라진 점이 뭐고 그 점으로 인해 어떻게 되었고
이 부분을 집중적으로 써주시기 바랍니다!