■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic :
In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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▶ Your Answer : It is evident that in our current society,the way how people improve house and industry has have tremendous importance in our lives. Some people side with that they should keep invest their money developing housing and industry, while others do not. I however, believe that land to left stay in natural condition is much better. There are several reasons that I could discuss to support my argument so I will limit my discussion to the two that I feel are the most relevant to the topic. Frist. the industry has side effects. Also, most diseases come from over-industrialization. (First~~Second~~도 좋지만 접속사를 이용해서 연결해주는것도 좋아용)
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First of all , the most importnat reason for my feeling this way is (that) developing the industry has side effects such as ruining the environment. From most scientists who major in environment, they agree that natural surroundings of hundred decades ago were much cleaner than nowadays. Also, they agree that when people had industry revolution, the rate of polluting air increased more than eighty times than before. This was because factories used coal and timber to produce energy and exceed Carbon Oxide more on air. Therefore, our surrounding had been corrupted a lot that nowadays people have to focus more on natural condition than industry. According to recent research conducted by National Environmental Policy Act in Korea, Japan, and China, every nation in the world need to put their head on to environment than developing their country. They added that people cannot live without nature but can live without developed housing and industry. As what they have said, at right now, my country needs to cease using land to develop housing and industry and concentrate on recovering environment.
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Also, the most important reason for my feeling this way is (that) the industrialization brought us a serious diseases. Many people suffer diseases caused by industrialization. such as “Respiratory disease” and “Skin disease” . After air pollutants emitted into the atmosphere, It is difficult to eliminate them. From most scientists who major in environment, they agree that air pollutant is the causes of the disease This applies in to a variety of different but relevant situations. My friend Tom, when he is was a young child. He lived near the plant.He was coughing frequently. but he didn’t know what is the causes of cough. after years ago, he was stricken with the pneumonia, the doctor think that a cause of disease is the pollutant which emitted by the factories. If he lives in a clean environment. he did might not suffer. It seems clear that land development and industry bring dangerous disease to my country.
All things considered, with the reasons mentioned above, I believe that I have sufficiently and adequately explained my position on the matters regarding the topic.
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