In your opinion, what is the most important characteristic (for example, honesty, intelligence, a sense of humor) that a person can have to be successful in life? Use specific reasons and examples from your experience to explain your answer.
'Honesty, intelligence and a sense of humor.' All of these characteristics are very vital factors to live in a humane society. However, if I have to choose the most important personality, I should select honesty without hesitation. There are numerous reasons to support my idea, but now, I'm looking at only two aspects, relationship with friends and co-workers, that should support my idea effectively.
In the first place, honesty is the most valuable things to build friendship. A few days ago, accidently I had a chance to talk about friendship with my friends. They talked many things to strengthen friendship such as a sense of humor, money, same hobby and so on. However, in the conversation, we became aware that these things only could additional factors to build friendship. If there is no honesty between friends, there is not friendship. Shortly, we couldn't be a friend without honesty.
In the second place, in the work place, honesty is more important than intelligence and a sense of humor. The goal of business is to get lots of money. Intelligence should be helpful get more benefit and a sense of humor cam make good circumstances to work without burden. However, if there is no honesty, the owner could give a chance to work to the worker. In other words, if we are not honest, we might not get a chance to work.
In conclusion, as I have stated the above, honesty is more important than intelligence and a sense of humor because we couldn’t be a friend and get a chance to work without t honesty.
1. 'Honesty, intelligence and a sense of humor.' 이런식으로 나열하는 것은 안되나요? 한국식으로 생각했을 때,
'정직함, 지능, 유머' 이 모든 것을이 인간사회를 살아가는데 중요하다. 이런 의미로 작성했는데 말이 되는건가요?
2. 첫 번째 본문은 친구사이에서 많은 중요한 가치가 있다. 하지만 그 가치들은 부수적인 것이다. 왜냐하면 정직함이 없으면 친구라는게 될 수도 없기 때문이다. 이런식으로 전개해 나가려 했는데 전달이 좀 되었나요?
3. 2번과 같은 식의 전개입니다. 회사의 목적은 돈버는 것이다. 지능은 돈을 더 버는데 도움이 되고 유머는 직장 분위기를 좋게 하는데 도움이 되지만, 정직함이 없다면 일할 수 있는 기회조차 얻을 수 없을 것이다. 따라서 정직함이 기본이다. 이런식의 전개로 하려고 했는데 영어가 짧다보니 저 따구로 밖에 써지지가 않네요.. 좋은 문장들 좀 없을까요?? ㅠㅠ
4. 삼십분동안 264자 썼네요.. ㅠㅠ
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