■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Some say it is more important for teachers to relate well with students than to share knowledge. Do you agree or disagree? | |
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The speaker asserts that momentous role of teacher is making relationship with students rather than teaching knowledge in order to do authentic learning. Few would disagree that it makes a better result for students to experience well relationship between pupil and master rather than to study knolwedge from teacher, especially if ultimate goals of education is showing the better way of life or socializing. However, if we only focus on the merits of intimacy between students and teacher, it is possible that we overlook the limit of its in outcomes in context of in context of academic development and vocational training.
It is important that the intimate relations between master and pupil, nevertheless, it does not meant that it is always more significant for teachers to relate well with pupils than to teach knowledge. As long as students have to learn about academic contents, it would be more important for master to teach knowledge than to make a good relationship with pupils. For example, famous Marxist Althusser had not have a good relationship with Ranciere who is a well-known French politic-philosopher and Althusser`s pupil in one, Ranciere could develop his theories and notions by Althusser`s careful academic lessons. It indicates that a certain teacher who is engaged in academic field could make a better outcome by teaching carefully rather than relating well with pupils.
Furthermore, the suggestion that teachers could struggle to teach knowledge for their pupils than to relate well with their students could be right in another sense. With respect to vocational training, it is more required that teachers severely teach students practical knowledge, even it wouldn`t be necessary to make a good relationship between student and teacher in this context. For instance, if someone want to get certified such as heavy equipment drive license, he or she would suffers from the driving instructor who pays attention to make a good relationship with students because what they needs right now is knowhow to drive a car. This indicates that teacher would be more concerned with teaching knowledge rather than making well relationship with pupil in vocational training.
To sum, despite of important of good relation between students and teachers, academic development and vocational training tell us that it would not be more important for teacher to relate well with pupil than to share awareness. Taken together, I cannot fully agree to the notion that effectiveness of teacher is a matter of relation between the subjects. Only by ignoring the context of academic progress and vocational education could one conclude that it is more significant for teacher to have a good relationship with students rather than to teach knowledge. |
읽어보시면 알겠지만, body는 4문장(대전제-소전제-실례-소전제 재언급)으로 구성되어 있구요,
서론 결론은 비슷한말을 논리 구조만 발전시키는 형태입니다(의미 확장 혹은 축소). |
gre처럼 바디3개로 하려니 시간이 너무 부족해서 하나 줄이고 대신 바디1내용을 서론에서 약간 언급하는 것으로
템플릿을 변경했습니다.
문법이 많이 약합니다. 검토 부탁드립니다.
요렇게 템플릿 이용하니 내용은 그닥 없는데 450개 언저리 단어 나오네요.
이런 류의 템플릿 활용은 패러프래이징이 문제네요. ㅋㅋ
저는 개인의 경험을 통해 논리를 뒷받침하는게 영 어색해서(물론 예가 도저히 생각안날 경우 어쩔수없이 사용하기도 합니다.) 특정한 상황을 부여하여 논리는 전개하는데 이게 브레인스토밍이 빨리 되면 금방 쓰고 안되면 답이 안나오는게 문제네요..;;
덧말. 랑시에르와 알뛰세 이야기는 약간 뻥입니다.-_-;