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People like to put priorities for all their situations. Also, according to their priorities, the situations’ are evaluated. However, people have to know that people usually think priority depends on their notions without fully understanding about that situation. It also happens in university as well, because of distributing budget, people usually give priority for each department, and athletic department does not get high priority, so they get less budget. However, they seriously need to get enough financial support for students whose dreams are athletes, and also offering good quality of facility to normal students and public.
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To begin with, the reason why the athletic department also need to get supported as much as library is because athletic department needs a lot of equipment to help to achieve students’ dreams. There are a lot of students, who have majoring in atheletic, dream their careers related with to the athletes, and there are variety fields of sports for athletes. Each of them requires appropriate equipment. University is the place to learn more and go closer to students’ dream, so they need to get deserved through fully support for their future.to have support from university or their future. For example, one of the famous exercise Pilates, a lot of equipment used, requires a lot of equiment, at least 4 items; bosu ball, jumping rope, medicine ball, and plastic bar for one hour exercise. In order to do that sport properly, the equipment should be acquired. Budget will be used to get all equipment for each field’s equipment. Hence, it is reasonable that athletic department get fund for student’s future.
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In addition, athletic department is not only for students whose major is realted with atheltes, but also for general students for their health, so in order to satisfy them, enough financial support is critical. Without any doubt, health is the most important element to all people. University students need place to exercise, and the athletic department is usually offered for general students and even public as well. general students and public usually uses atheletic deprtment. For instance, in the University of Manitoba, it has the program named mini U which is for young kids in community, and they have camp in their university and with a lot of activities. In order to make those events happened, to happen, they need volunteers, actual teachers for the activities, snacks, enough equipment and facilities. All those issues are related with the athletic department. It is very hard to maintain them perfectly, thus that athletic department is also one of the departments needs that desperately needs financial support desperately.
To conclude, athletic department needs finance aid as much as libraries because there are a lot of students who are thinking their future related with the athletes. In order to make them to be athletes, they need enough equipment for their training. Also, health is very significant issue and the athletic department takes charge of giving place to people for their healthy life. People tend to underestimate athletic department, but actually they are as valuable as library to get fully supported . |