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People like to give priorities for all their situations(,) and depends depending on the given priorities the situations are evaluated. This is what happens when the budget is distributed for each department. Usually athletic department does not get high priority in universities, so they get fewer budgets. However, 1. actually need to get enough financial support for students whose dreams are athletes, and offering good quality of facility to normal students and public.
1. 문장 전체의 동사, 즉 본동사가 없습니다. 운동선수가 되고 싶어하는 학생들에게 재정적 지원은 필수이며, 이러한 지원이 결국엔 일반 사람들에게도 더 나은 시설을 제공하는데 도움이 된다 라고 쓸 경우, it is actual need to give~ and it will be helpful even for~.
To begin with, the reason why the athletic department should get financial support as much as what library gets also gets supported as much as library is that athletic students need it to get support for their future as well. There are a lot of students(,) whose major is have major in athletic(,) and they dream to be athletes or profession related to their careers related with the athletes. One of the ways to support their dream is offering them enough equipment for each kind of sports. For example, one of the famous exercise, pilates, needs at least 4 items as its equipment which are a lot of equipment used(,) at least 4 items; bosu ball, jumping rope, medicine ball, and plastic bar for one hour exercise. If students have enough equipment then they can increase the efficiency of their major. Hence, it is reasonable that athletic department get fund for student’s future.
In addition, athletic department is not only for students whose major in, but also for general students for their health other students’ health(,) so that enough financial support is necessary in order to satisfy them so in order to satisfy them, enough financial support is critical. Without any doubt, health is the most important condition to all people. University students need place to exercise(,) and the athletic department is usually offers it for all students offered for general students and even public as well. For instance, in Canada, the University of Manitoba, it has the program called “mini U,” which is for young kids in community(,) and they have camp in their university and they do a lot of activities. In order to make those events happened(;) they need volunteers, actual teachers for the activities, snacks, enough equipment and facilities. All those issues are related to with the athletic department. It is very hard to maintain them perfectly, thus that department is also one of the departments needs financial support desperately.
To conclude, athletic department needs finances as much as libraries do because there are a lot of students who want to be are thinking their future related with the athletes. In order to make them to be athletes, they need enough equipment for their training. Also, health is very significant and the athletic department takes charge of giving place for to people for to keep one’s their healthy life. People tend to underestimate athletic department(,) but actually they are as valuable as library to get fully supported .
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