First of all, the most important reason for my feeling way that i felt this way is (that) individual people have has an interest in environmental problem. Commonly society people tend to important about environmental issues. Commonly, some people in these days show interest in environmental issues .People want to live in a pleasant environment, and individual people try to making is trying to make good environment.This remind me of a time when I lived in small town. My front of the house House front of mine was very dirty, and In the every morning, I cleaned the yard.I cleaned the yard every morning. Two months ago, people who live living in a small town started copying to follow my behavior. As a result, the village was clean all of part. became clean. On top of that If i don’t clean my fornt mt house.i didn't clean my neighbor's house Our town will has still a lot of trash on the street.our time could have been a full of trash. As this experience shows, individual people can do to something about the regarding environmental issues.
Also, the most important reason for my feeling way is (that) a solution of environmental issues is started that individual people recognize the problem. that i felt this way is that solution to the environmental problems started to appear after an individul person recognzied problems. Commonly society personal people tend to knowing about environmental problem quickly. In these days, people tend to find out problems quickly. Since people know about a problem, and they prefer to solve the problem. they prefer to solve problem. So Therefore,(So는 문장할때 쓰지 마세요) individual people person is being know about an environmental problem , and they will be to solve the problem. try to solve a problem. According to an article from the New York Times, Not only many people worry about environmental issues, but 67 persent of the people try to solve the problem. Not only that many people recognize environmental issues, about 67% of those people are trying to solve some environmental prolems. According ro to another study, many people are donated to an environmental movement through on the internet. It is true that this money can continue their environmental movement. such as “Amazon Forest Conservation” and “ Arctic Animal Protection” If people don’t donation. donate, a environmental problem is would be extremely serious than the past. As the study shows, a solution of solutions to the environmental issues is are beginning from individual people.
All things considered, with the reasons mentioned above, I believe that I have sufficiently and adequately explained my postion position on the matters regarding this topic.
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