▶ Your Answer : Nowadays, most people are busy because of their work. They try to find a activity to forget about their work when they enjoy it. If people spend their time with hobbies or activities that are related to their jobs, they can probably do it well, however it can be easily bored soon because these are stuff that they do every day. Thus, I truly believe that people should spend their extra time with hobbies or activities that are not relate to their work because they can literally enjoy it and have many experiences.
First of all, people should spend their break time with a thing that they can have lot of fun from it. Typically, they accumulate a huge amount of stress from their work, and if they have a hobby that has relationship with their work, it is definitely going to be tedious for them. Moreover, if they do not really do well on it, they might feel upset about it. On the other hand, if people have a hobby that is new for them, they do not have to worry about their ability and can just enjoy it. For instance, I am working at school as a basketball coach. I used to play basketball if I was had nothing to do with, but it was really horrible because if I lost the game, my proud was damaged because I could not accept that professional basketball coach lost basketball against just normal people. Thus I changed my hobby which is golf, and I can literally enjoy it because I do not have to concern about many things as I play basketball.
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On top of that, it is always good for people to have many experiences in their lives. There are just a huge amount number of hobbies that those they can choose during their extra time. They obviously have experienced most of things parts(things는 가능하면 쓰지 말아 주세요) about their work. Therefore,having hobbies other than their work or related to their work, is even better for them to accumulate a variety of experiences and these experiences can help them as they live their lives. For instance, I had have a certification of first aid. Couple of years ago, I was looking for to do something in my free time and I decided to study for its certification. After I got certification, there was a big car accident in front of my house. Some people got injured, and their blood had to stop as fast as possible. Because Since(문장 시작할때 because는 별로 좋지 않습니다) I knew what to do, I immediately stopped their blood from what I had leaned learned from my first aid test. Thanks to knowledge what I got from my hobby time, I could have save their lives.
To sum up, I strongly believe that having hobbies that are not related to their work is so much better because people are be able to have lots of fun from and experiences from it.
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