People have various opinions on whether universities and high school should teach students about specific careers and fields instead of general subjects. Although opponents may exist, I believe that universities and high schools should teach not only the specific careers but also the general subjects.It is mostly because, general subjects must be taught in high school before university educations since most of jobs require specific knowledge. Moreover, basic facts from general subjects is helpful to handle the emergency during careers.
#general subject 를 반드시 배워야한다면서 그 이유로 대학들이 특정지식을 요한다라는 문장은 설득력이 없어보입니다. general 과 specific을 구분하셔서 글을 쓰셔야 합니다. 주장이 논리적으로 표현될다 할 수 없기때문에 앞으로는 이런 문장에서 많은 주의를 기울여주세요!
First, high school students must be well informed the basic facts before studying specific fields in universities. Moreover, university students must regain 왜 다시 습득해야된다는거죠? utilize the knowledge from the subjects the learned in high school for their future career. Some may argue that people should not waste their time to learn learning facts out of their specialization unless having double major or multiple occupations 정확히 이 문장이 필요한지 의문이 듭니다. 복수전공등을 빼시고 특정분야에서만의 공부는 waste of time이라고 풀어서 구체적으로 써주시는게 좋을것 같습니다. facts out of their specializaion->[their field of study] . However, most of careers require the employees to have stored the basic facts beside the requirements for of their jobs. For example, when someone entered in the field of saving lives such as doctors, nurses, or pharmacists, they practically need technologies for their own fields. However, a number of these professionals are able to speak other languages fluently, and have well informed skills of manupilating computers. Moreover, athletes of any fields are able to perform the First Aid treatment in emergency as well as mastered at their sports. The reason for this is identified that many fields are expanding abroad, and the top positioned person of each profession have a desire to have versatile employees so they can???________????
Since the process of becoming elite professional is getting more difficult and complicated, many young people in college or high schools should try hard to study general subjects before entering professional world. This is why univesities universities and high schools should teach students general subjects.
사용하신 예시가 올바른지 의구심이 듭니다. 또한, 이유가 모호하여 이 문단 자체로는 주제를 충분히 뒷받침하고 있다 판단할 수 없습니다. 학생들이 일반 과목을 소흘히 하지 말아야한다는 주장에 뒷받침되는 이유로 이문단에서는 특정분야에서도 다양한 지식으로 겸비된 사람을 채용하고자한다라고직접적으로 말하셨기보다는 간접적으로 의도만 보여주셨습니다. 즉, 다시말하면 이유가 읽혀지지 않고 있습니다. 또한 예시 역시 충분한 설명이 되어있지 않습니다.
Moreover, learning geneal knowledge will contribute to dealing with emergencies during professions throughout life/during their career. In other words, various unexpected events may occur while working but with the wisdoms and experience from the general subjects will be helpful to deal with them dealing with the problems. For example, when the earthquake occurs, most people in the buildings are afraid and feel confused what to do. However, if they remember the a basic and vitally crucial fact that people must stay undereneath objects such as tables, desks, or chairs to avoid the another dangerous attack, like falling light obects objects on some's their head. Although many materials became become broken or malfunctioned after the earthquake, the precious lives of people can be prolonged through the vital fact that they learned in science class. Likewise, knowledge from general facts is practical for people to deal dealing with life threatening moments. In this regard, remembering the important facts from the general subjects that learned repeatedly before careers is helpful.
To conclude, high schools and universities should teach students with general subjects rather than specific fields because of the trend of careers that require is now requiring multiskilled workers multiskills, and usefulness of these knowledges are useful for unexpected situations in the future. |