■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :It is more valuable to receive advice from older friends than from those in the same age. | |
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It is often said that advice of older friends is more valuable than same age's friends one. Some people may believe that advice of friends in same age is more beneficial than older freinds's one because friends in same age share common problems. However, I also think that older friend's advice is better than same age's friend thing. Older people undergone many situation than yonger people, so they can treat many difficult problems.
First of all, as i have noticed above, Older friends undergone many difficult situation. Modern people face diverse situation as they become older. As older friends have been faced many difficult problems than same age's friend, they can better treat this problems than younger friends. Therefore, I can recieve better advices from them. For example, I have both Older friend and same age's friend. when I have trouble in writting reports, my older friend teaches me how to write report forms,what I should be careful. But same age's friend can't give any advices for me because he also cannot know about it.
In Addition, I can become carefull through older friend's advice. People become more careful as they glow old. Likewise, I can achieve mental maturity as I get along with older friend. Sometimes, friends in same age are not precautious and rude. For instance, I often meet my high school's friends in weekend,
they only talk about girls, they do not think about thier future carefully so I can't talk about my recent important problems. But when I meet older friend who are my university's senior, I can talk about my future,grades,university life and so on. He makes me feel that I become more muture than peers.
To sum up, I firmly believe that advice of older friend is better for me than friends in same age's friend.
Older friend have treated many problems, so they can give me good advices and they make me more careful. It is impossible from same age's friend. | |
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