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It is a debatable issue that People are never satisfied with what they have and want other things. People who grew up from diverse environments maintain various understandings toward the issue. Some people disagree with the statement because we can see many rich people who are satisfied with their money and life. However, regardless of what opponents argue, my personal take on the matter is that people are never satisfied with what they have. I can list a number of reasons that I could use to support my idea, but I will limit my discussion to two of the most important points. Firstly, there are many presidents of Korea who tried to make secret fund and secondly, many people who are working in great company want to change their job.
(Firstly ~~ Secondly~~ 보다 접속사로 연결해주시는게 문장이 더 부드러어ㅜ보여요)
The first and most convincing reason behind my contention regarding the topic is that we can easily find the case of presidents who had raised a slush fund. For example, Duhwan Jeon, one of the presidents of Korea, built up secret money when he was in a term. This is because he didn't satisfy with what he had and wanted more money even though he got a lot of money as a president. Also, Taewoo No, the successor of Duhwan Jeon, did same action. In addition to these cases, we can hear the similar stories about the celebrities who treid to make a secret fund. These cases certainly make us realize that people are not satisfied with what they have and want more.
실제있었던 일을 예로 쓰므로써 예시가 매우 설득력있네요. 좋은 Body입니다.
The second point that I would like to bring to light in arguing my stance lies in the fact that many workers in the great company in which many people wish to enter want to change their job. I worked at Samsung which is the number one company, so many friends envied me very much. However, I was not pleased at that time although working at the company was my dream before entering there. Therefore I quit the job and enter the graduate school. I thought I would make me myself happy enough, but I was not. I want different things again. This is not only for me and there are a lot of people alike me. This clearly indicates that poeple people are never satisfied and want something different.
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Looking at the statements above, there are many reasons to be considered. To sum up, there are many presidents who tried to make secret money although they had earn much money as a president. Also, people who work in the company that they wanted to enter commonly want to change their job. I firmly believe that the aforementioned arguments adequately support the position that people are not satisfied with what they heve have and want something diffrent. |