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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The decision that people make quickly are always wrong.
Use specific reason and example to support your answer. | |
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▶ Your Answer :
It is debatable issue whether people decide the important issue quickly or not. Because since(Because는 문장 앞에 쓰면 안됩니다) it can be judged from by the existing state of things. Some people belive that the decisions that people make rapidly are always wrong. However, I disagree with the idea because desision fast fast decision can build a leadership skills and cover certain fatal accidents.
Fist, First, If you make decision rapidly , it can build a leadership skills and social skills. For example, While at university When i attend university, I always make made a decision fast, such as choosing cloth or some fashion ithems for my friends. Also when we went to restaurant , I decided the dishes quickly . Thus, I could be leader of my friends group and they feel felt comfortable when they stayed with me.
Moreover, Make make decision quickly can cover some deadly situations. From my experience, when I was a high school student, I saw the one child on the street in front of my school. At that time, I worred worried about that kid,child(Kid는 에세이에선 잘 사용하지 않습니다), so immediatly ran and snatched him. Afterward, cars came to us, so I think that I saved his life. In this sence, sense make desision fast is wise when it comes to an emergency.
In conclusion, We decide quickly is very good way sometimes. Sometimes making fast decision is good. It will help enhance leadership skills ans social skills. Also, we can meet the emergency situations???이 부분은 이해가 되지 않습니다. | |
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