Agree or disagree? Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that would destroy the friendship. |
Those who are too sensitive might not want to be told about their misbehavior. However, I think that we should advice and say to our friends about their mistakes even if it is harmful to the friendship than to let a friend make a mistake(???문장에서 이상해요). There are two major reasons: our friends will be happy that they have an advisor and there will not be misunderstanding. First of all, there's nobody who likes someonewho tells them about their mistake. However, to think about on a long run, it is better to tell friends their mistake because somehow it can have a misunderstanding, for example, if I have a big mistake, and your friend don't tell me anything about my mistake. I can misunderstanding him for he doesn't paying attention to me. This can become more worse for our friendship. Also, some people will happy to have a good friends and at the same time is a good advisor because they can tell each other's mistake or secret which can't talk about to other people. Moreover, in my experience, if the friends who doesn't want to listen their mistake it has no reason to maintain their relationship. Some people are have a egoistic mind. It is not a good personality to have a good friend. For example when I was 10years old, I'm going to the cram school, I have a many friends on their. Some friends are really kind, and some are not, especially one friends are really egoistic. She don't want to listened her mistake, and she always wanted things from other, never give things to other. And some they I had a fight with her because of her bad personality. She have a big mistake, but she didn't want to recognize that. So I doesn't needed to maintain the relationship. Like this if someone are doesn't want to listen their mistake or doesn't recognize their mistake. I suggest that we don't need to maintain the relationship. To conclude, there are many different people in the earth, and each other's have different personality. Sometimes we have to point out their mistake, but we need to recognize our mistakes too. Therefore I think that if the relationship is going worse to tell to their friends mistake, we have to saying there mistake. |
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1. 관사 제발 지키세요! a the an 꼭 지키세요!!
2. 조동사 뒤에는 무조건 동사 원형입니다!!!! 동사원형입니다!
3. 한번 자신이 만든 문장을 한글로 해석해서 읽어보세요
논리가 하나도 안맞습니다 한글로 해석해서 읽어보시면 바로 아실꺼에요.
4. 본문의 구성은 이렇습니다
첫번째 문장은 topic sentence로 thesis sentence를 뒷받침해주는 문장을 쓰셔야해요 근데 본문의 첫문장들은 topic sentence라고 생각할 수가 없군요..
moreover 뒤에 어째서 example 이라 할 수 있는 in my experience가 오는 거죠 ㅠ
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