■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic :Shopping center in my town. 찬성? 반대?
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Building a new shopping center may be good to the town as having profits. Even so, it is evident that it will have many disadvantages. There are two primary reasons why I strongly oppose to building a large shopping mall in my town. With new entertainments, there would be crowd and noisy. Moreover, there will be even environmental pollution.
Firstly, the much people there are, the noisier it is. It is apparent that building new shopping center will make a lot of people gather. Furthermore, the side of the mall will have events to have more customers. Consequently, it is clear that the town will have the noise. As for me, I have a propel experience to illustrate. When I lived in Osaka, Japan, I chose a silent apartment to live. However, a new shopping center was built near my house after a year. Even though there was a quiet town, the town began to popular. On the every weekend, they had a show to get focus. It really bothered me to have quiet time
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Secondly, another disadvantage of building a new shopping mall is environmental concern. In particular, the problems were not only corporate dumping but also air pollution because of much traffic. The government of my town had compared the amount of garages before and after having a new department. The research result says that the dumping increased twice bigger before building the mall. Besides, there was traffic jam everyday. As increasing the number of cars, the town had air pollution. Since the city decided to build a new department store, the city had much environmental concerns.
In brief, I firmly believe that the disadvantages of building new shopping malls far outweigh the advantage. It is not only because too much people will gather the town but also because the plan will make the town have environmental concern.
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