A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position. |
I oppose against the announcement that company wishes to build a large factory near my community. Although there may be several advantages of having the large factory around us in some aspects, I believe that there would be more disadvantages than advantages. First, I am going to discuss about the advantages. If the large factory is established in my community, the problem of unemployment which is considered quite seriously would get better. The factory will need many workers to run it, so some people who could find no job would probably be able to get jobs from the factory. The other good thing of building a factory is that it is going to create a great productivity. The great productivity will also make the markets of the community affluent and active. Secondly, unlike it is discussed above, there are many disadvantages by letting the company build the large company. Those bad effects are largely categorized to two parts: pollutions and traffic jam. About pollutions, it brings air pollution and much noisy. Because many machines of the factory work all day and they make such an annoying sound when they are running, we will be annoyed and get stressed by the noisy all the day. Moreover, the factory produces not only noisy but also smoke, which cause serious air pollution. Those two cruel pollutions have bad influence to our health and also make us bothered in our lives. The other disadvantage is traffic congestion. Even if there is no huge factory around my community, traffic jam is still so stressful especially in the early morning and in the evening when people commute. Building factory will bring even worse traffic problem due to the people who commute from the factory. As you can see, there are both some good points and some other bad points about establishment of large factory. However, I firmly claim that it has many bad influences more than good to the people who live in the community. Therefore it is better not to allow the company build the factory for my community.
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intro에 Building a factory can be both beneficial and harmful to the community. 이런 내용으로 시작해서...
body 1> Building a factory brings many merits to the community in that it boosts the economy and productivity. 의 내용
body 2> However, as helpful the factory might be for the community , it also has many shortcomigs, and they are really crucial in that they threaten the health of people in town.
body 3> In my case, I oppose to the establishment of a factory in my town, because the disadvantage of it overrules the benefits it offers. For me, the health of people and the sanitation of where we live is more important . 의 내용 .
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