some people agree with the use of tax money to explore outer space. others think this money should be spent to provide for society's basic needs. which of two opinions do you agree with? |
Since human have >>had (과거 부터 지금까지 이래로니까 since 뒤에는 과거를 써야죠) a dream that >> to ( to 부정사 형용사적 용법) go to the moon, there has been a lot of research about outer space. Now days which interest seems to be increased >> increase ( 자동사도 있어요) in as much as world have emergency issues such as global warming or alternative energy. So some people agreed that there is need to explore the universe to search new source of energy. However I firmly believe that government should use the tax for society’s fundamental and people who were not received >> did not receive advantages of welfare , which require more social and economical attention.
솔직히 무슨 의미인지는 알겠으나 문법적으로 오류가 인 문장들이 너무나 많네요. 이왕이면 문법책 간단하게 마치시고 하시면 글이 더욱 정확해 질 것 같습니다.
To be starter, all over the world have common problem is global warming. >> The common problem the countries all over the world have is global warming. To solve global warming, each government should try to hard ( 생략 ) to improve their environment. Reorganize confused transportation system and preserve their woods for improving weather either people 뭐가 주어인지 잘 모르겠어요~ㅜ ㅜ For example,
문법 공부가 필요합니다.
Moreover, using tax for poverty population is necessary. Some nation that are trough violence war such as Middle Asia, have a lot of people who experienced serious poverty and hunger. They can not have own house and food even water. Many countries sent financial aid for them but they could not receive help. This is because their government using the money for themselves to political goal. And it is keep vicious circle of poverty and starvation. If their Government used the money of tax for their citizens, they could be released from those serious issues.
Therefore, I thought it is more important that government wisely distribute the tax money for social basic needs than exploring outer space. |