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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? | |
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We do many things for getting to obtain knowledge, and there are differences in getting knowledge, to experience(무엇을 경험한다는걸, 새로운환경? 또는 새로운문화? 등등.추가해주세요) and readiong books. Although the preference of these methods ways would be different and it depends on people, I prefer to get source information through books and I think that it is more important than experience.
The knowledge obtained from experience is remains in our memory more clearly. People get many things to remember many things, but they are more likely to remember what they do themselves. It is not abstract things they learn from school or books, since they understand the knowledge more easily and utterly (utterly는 형언할수없을만큼 너무나 완전한 그런뜻입니다.)from experience. Experience is also what we see and feel in flash so it is really good to get the knowledge deeply not just seeing the surface of knowledge.
In contrast, knowledge comes from book is not real so people forget the knowledge more easily than experience but book is in terms the result of someone’s experience such as experiment or travel. So the knowledge we get though book is much efficient because we do not spend time on learning detail to get the knowledge and takes short time in compared to experience. In addition, the knowledge is well organized from the book editor.
Although there are many advantages in the knowledge got from experience, it cannot be more important than book. Experience stands on what you do. Thus, we cannot see the knowledge with a different view in case you have some prejudice about the knowledge. It is also no use when you want to get more difficult knowledge because your experience is not recorded so you might fail getting knowledge if you wanted to get more complicated knowledge from your experience. Besides, it takes too much time when you need knowledge from your from your experience like experiment in compared to book. Yet, the knowledge gained from book is pretty easier to get than experience so that it is well organized, and we do not need much time and money to get the knowledge without experience.
All in all, getting knowledge with book is more important than experience for the reasons that we can consider the wide range of knowledge we get to learn. Therefore, I recommend you to buy a book to get knowledge when you have to get much information in limited period or need wide or you prefer efficiency on getting knowledge. | |
님의 가장 큰 문제점이 고난이도로 쓰고 싶어 하시는데 단어가 따라주질 않습니다.
무엇보다 너무 좁게 쓰시는것 같구요, 약간 넓은 의미로 다가가보세요.
"경험에서 오는지식은 우리기억속에 더 명료하게 남아있다. 사람들은 기억하기위해 많은것을 얻는다." 여기까지 나쁘진 않습니다.
"그러나 그들은 그들이 한행동 자체를 기억한다" 라고 표현하고 싶으신거죠? 추상적인 의미가 아닌 그들이 한행동
맞죠?
그들이 한 행동 그 자체만을 기억한다. 이건 딱봐도 너무 어렵고, 무엇보다 미국엔 이런표현이 없을겁니다. maybe^^
대신,뭐 예를들면, (저는 경험에 찬성했었기 때문에^^)
책은 추상적이지만, 그 범위가 한정된다.
Books may force people to a narrow of thinking.
책은 사람들을 좁은 사고방식에 가둘수도 있다.
추상적이고 교훈적이라는건 왜 안썼냐면, 모든사람들이 알고 있는 사실이기 때문이죠^^
이런 TOEFL 에쎄이는 informal에 가깝기 때문에 주어 "나" 가 들어갈 수 있지만, 실제 에쎄이들은 내가 들어가면 안됩니다. 그건 규칙입니다.^^
미국에선 발표하는사람이 발표하는건데 왜 나는 이렇게 생각한다 라고 말하나? 라고 생각하거든요. 좀 이상하게 생각합니다. 뭐 하지만, 토플은 허용하니 괜찮습니다.
Here are two of definite answers 여기 확실한 두가지 답이있다. 뭐 이런거 한번쯤은 들어보셨을거라 생각합니다^^
이야기가 이상한데로 흘렀네요. 아무튼!
문법은 크게 문제되는건 없어보이구요, book 이 아니라 books 이구요~
좁게 쓰지마시구. 넓게 한 번 써보세요. 표현을 바꾸는대신 님이 하고자 하는말의 의미는 담겨있게^^
궁금한거 있으시면 댓글다세요.