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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : People do many different things to stay healthy. What do you do for good health? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. | |
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There are many stories about how people can stay healthy, and each may have one’s specific strategies to keep their health. In my opinion, there are three important ways for us to stay healthy. One is regular exercise. Another is to stay away from instant foods. Lastly, we should keep away from such things bad habits like smoking or drinking too much.
Above all, regular exercise will be helpful for your health. Today, many people are jogging every early morning, so they can breathe fresh air. By breathing fresh air every single morning, your lung capacity will be increased. Also, regular exercise is very good for stress relief. Thus, you can relieve your stress from study or work.
Nowadays, many people have eaten eat instant foods like ramen. However, it these will also harm their health severely because instants foods contain a lot of artificial flavor enhancers.(artificial additives) These monosodium glutamates will be built up in human’s body, so it they will cause severe health problems. Instead of that, consuming organic foods at home, will make you can stay healthy.
On top of that, we should also stay away from smoking or drinking too much. Tar and nicotine contained in cigarettes are crucial factors to damage lung capacity according to recently study by University of Seoul. The study also says that if you keep smoking over 20 years, it would lead you to die by lung cancer.
All in all, many people want to live healthier. To stay healthy, one of the keys is regular exercise. Moreover, you should stay away from instants food, smoking, and drinking. If you keep in mind at least these three ways that I recommend, you will probably stay healthy. | |
결국 300자도 못채우고 끝났는데. 정말 쉽다고 생각했는데 너무 안써져서 쓰는 내내 답답했습니다. 시간도 약간 오버되고, 분량도 못채우고. 쉽다는 생각에 이유를 3개 써보려했던게 아마 과했던것 같기도 하구요. 더 좋은 의견 있으시면 부탁드려요. 쓰고나니 뭔가 쓰다가 말았다는 느낌도 들구요. 만약 두개로 이유를 줄여서 좀더 조직적으로 쓴다면 어떤식으로 방향을 잡는게 나을까요?
자신이 이런것을 지키기 위해서 어떤 노력을하는지를 한문단에 한문장씩만 보태면 더 좋을것같습니다