▶ Your Answer : Some people thinks that when they consider
a major purchase, the information from magazines is has the greatest impact on their
choices. However, in my case the reviews from online communities is are the major factors that change my purchase. This is because Since the reviews allow people to get various
information easily and the magazine articles are offering not reliable information. (since는 주절이 필요합니다)To begin with, reading reviews from online
communities has advantages. It writes down They are written by diverse customers with different characteristics such as age and gender in every ages and
genders. Also, since it is offered by they can be found on the Internet, people can readily access to the
product’s information and customers' comments. It just need requires a few clicks clicking. Moreover, this these communities usually share not only the good’s information but the events that are relevant
with these products. For example, I made a major purchase last month, the microwave,
since it costed a lot is very highly cost decision, I have had to choose the product very carefully.
To choose an affordable one, I entered joined the electricity machine purchase community.
I searched the information selecting few factors. Such as age, gender, electricity
consume rate, purpose (해석이 되지 않는 어색한 문장입니다). Then the site shows showed me some nice a list of good products and it
offers also showed a wide array of the comments. Through this site, I regarded read these
comments and made a the best purchase.
On top of that, taking note of information from magazines has
few disadvantages. Since the magazines have its their own customer field and purpose (어색한 표현입니다),
they tend to be targeting specific subscribers. Therefore, this information might
be unreliable. Moreover, they usually open many events for their customers subscribers and
it make people to make hasty conclusion. For example, my mother bought a lip
stick lipstick after watching reading the recommendations in the woman’s magazine. At first, she
has no regret on did not regret this decision, but after a few days she started regretting her
choices. Because because it is was more too expensive than the goods and the color was not
suitable for did not suit her. When the model was wearing it, it was seemed perfect but, she does not consider did not know that all models in the magazines have bright color skin tones, although she has
darkish skin tone.
To sum up, the reviews form online communities
make people to access various information easily and the information from
magazine makes people to make hasty decisions. In this regard I think that reviews from online
communities is has greatest impact on my purchase.
Score: 8-11 Comments: - 구조가 잘 잡혀있습니다. - 제시된 이유가 적절합니다. - 설명이 명확하지 않은 부분들이 있습니다. - informal한 부분들이 많습니다. - 어색한 표현과 문법 실수들이 많습니다. - ex) This + 명사 (단수로 써주셔야 합니다). - 예시 설명이 불필요하게 길어지고 있습니다.
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