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There might be some people who believe that parents today
understand their children as well as parents did fifty years ago. However, I
personally disagree with the above idea for two subsequent reasons: the
development of technology and busier life (어색한 표현입니다) - 문장으로 이유를 풀어서 써주시는 것이 더 좋을 것 같습니다..
First of all, the technology has been developed rapidly so it
makes making a big generation gap. To be specific, the generation gap between parents
and their children causes difficulties to understand each other. Let me bring
my personal experience. I asked my parents to buy me a new smartphone last month but
they told me “You have a phone that I bought two years ago! I will buy the new one when your phone breaks or malfunctions a new
phone if the phone were out of order” 간접으로 풀어서 써주세요. At that time, I cannot could not understand because
the used phone is not smartphone so I am not able to enter the internet (어색한 문장입니다 - I was upset because the phone I was using was not a smart phone and I was not able to use the internet on my phone). My
parents just think thought that the phone’s usage is should only be used when calling others to someone for now.
On top of that, parents and their children have busy lives
these days. Over the past fifty years, the number of working parents are has been increasing and their
children have more extra-curricular activities (이전 문장과의 연결이 매끄럽지 않습니다 - and children have more extra-curricular activities today). For that reason, there is less time
to communicate with family members and harder to understand thoughts that they have (어색한 문장입니다).
According to a recent research done by Korean Communication Institute, 80% of
respondents made up of 100 parents and their children said that they spent spend time
with their family less than 1 hour in a day. The result is different to the research
done in 1970 which is showed that only 20% of respondents mentioned that they spend less than 1
hour in a day with their family.
In this regard, there are not only the technology’s
developments but also busy life.not only technology has developed, but people today have much busier lives that they rarely communicate with their family members.
For these reason, I strongly believe that parents today do
not understand their children as well as parents did fifty years ago.
Score: 8 Comments: - 구조가 잘 잡혀있습니다. - 제시된 이유가 적절합니다. - 문법 실수들이 많습니다. - 어색한 표현들이 많습니다.
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