▶ Your Answer : 전문성에 좋다 / stressful
Some people might argue that students should sign up for elective courses in a wide variety of subjects. However, in my opinion, I personally believe that students should take courses that are directly related to their majors for two reasons. This is because taking courses that are related to their majors would broadly expand their knowledge, and it is stressful to take courses in a wide variety of subjects reduces stress.
To begin with, to enhance students' knowledge, it is better to concentrate on their major. When students take elective courses which is highly related to their major, contents and knowledge are correlated to their majors, which will help them understand better in such courses. In addition, students will have wide comprehension of their majors. For example, recent study conducted by Korea university determine which students have better grade whether they take relevant elective courses or the counterpart determines which students have a better grade when each takes relevant elective courses. The group of students take takes courses in similar to their majors have been reported has reported average seven points higher score in eighty-seven percentage of elective courses. This is because students can easily understand overall contents of courses. This obviously shows that relevant elective courses are better than the others. On top of that, taking various elective courses is much stressful to students. This is because students nowadays are too busy due to the competitiveness of their majors since social trend is competitiveness Spending spare time on various courses, therefore, would be a burden to students since students have to separately study on such courses. My own experience demonstrates convincing example of this. When I was freshman in college, I took courses in various subject. I wanted to learn as many things as possible, but when I had to take exam, I struggled to memorize different kind of knowledge in the same time. I, consequently, ended up with lower grade that I expected. If I have taken courses that are related to my major, it would have been easier to get higher grade. To sum up, students can easily develop their knowledge by taking relevant courses, and because students will be more stressful if they take courses in a wide variety of subjects. In this regard, I strongly believe that it is better to for students to take courses which is coincidence with their majors. Fair: 17~23 점수: 23 일단 전반적으로 매끄럽게 에세이를 잘 서술하였습니다. 각 바디의 예시들이 이유를 잘 서포트 해주고 있습니다. 하지만 문제가 되는 부분은 문법적인 오류입니다. 특히 어법상 틀린 부분들이 있습니다. 제가 첨삭한 것을 보시고 확인 해주시길 바랍니다. 또한 전체적으로 본인의 이유에 대한 설명이나 언급이 작았습니다. 따라서 좀 더 살을 붙이는게 더 좋을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |