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Some people might say that television has
greater influence on human society than internet. However, in my opinion, the
internet has more significant effect on the human society than television for
two reasons.
To begin with, internet has developed technology
industry than television does. The emergence of internet made a myriad of
information to be share really quickly shared rapidly. The eclectic information from the
internet enables people to approach new industry especially technology which is
dominant industry of the world nowadays. For example, I saw the ‘Great impact
of technology’ of Discovery channel few days ago. And it showed that because of
the advent of internet, the influence to the development of technology is
increased about 3800% and the velocity of fostering the industry is enhanced
500% in comparison to the television does.
On top of that, internet has no regulation
compared to the television. Television has a huge regulation against contents
since the government and the television station eliminate secret information or
some adverse contents. But internet displays wide variety of contents because
people can upload whatever they want. It means that in can (무슨 말을하려고 하는 건가요?) convey lots of clear
information without any regulation to the people and this instigate instigates people to
have diverse knowledge. For instance, few years ago in Korea there was manipulation
of information which was broadcasted broadcast in television about the accident of ‘sewol
ship’, which was one of biggest issue that took away lots of people’s life.
However internet revealed that it was fabricated by government and found the true
fact of happening.
To sum up, for these reasons that I mentioned
above, the internet has affected on human society way more than television has
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