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Some people think that people are less pleased and gratified these days then people were in the past, while other people think differently. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their opinions. If I have to choose one, I would say that people today are less happy and gratified than people were in the past. There are several reasons and example as follow. First of all, it is more easy to find a job to enjoy. In the past, there were few job choices because economy was so limited. However, as country’s economy have developed has been developed, there occurs a lot of job choices and people can pursuit a variety of occupations. According to a study that was conducted by researchers, there are significant gaps between formal generation and new generation. To be specific, people of the formal generation are working for specialized area and people of the new generation are working for unlimited areas. This is because, older people tended to choose their jobs based on high salary in order to lead their families, on the other hands, newer people tend to choose their jobs based on their characters. This shows that economic circumstance can impact people’s job choices. On top of that, there are is a large amount of entertainment, People today have more time to enjoy their free time and have enough economic power. Thus, people want to enjoy newer and more diverse activities and amusement. For example, When my mother was a child, there were few entertainment places. However, When I was child, there were a lot of entertainment places life singing room and amusement park. Moreover, as my mother’s economic power become better and she have more time to enjoy her free time, she wanted to go to the diverse entertainment places. Also, as this types of people become bigger, the amusement industry have developed, and more and more entertainment has occurred. To sum up, people today can find their enjoyable occupations and more and more entertainment industry become bigger. In this regard, I firmly believe that people these days less pleased and gratified than people were in the past. Good: 24~30 점수: 25 대채로 잘 서술하엿습니다. 독립형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분은 본인의 에세이를 통해서 상대방을 설득 할 수 있냐 입니다. 지금 이러한 면에 있어서는 지금 이 에세이는 충분하게 잘 전달하고 잇는 거 같습니다. 각 바디의 예시들도 이유를 충분하게 서포트 하고 있습니다. 계속 이런식으로 에세이를 서술하시면 좋을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |