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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : Printed books have had more positive effect on society than television.
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It is often said that television has had positive effects on our lives. Although some people may agree with the statement above, I firmly believe that advantages of printed books are more significant. There are several reasons for this opinion, and I would like to describe two of the most important ones. First, printed books offer us lots of useful knowledges. Moreover, possibility to select a book makes it more efficient. it is easier to choose a good book.
Most importantly, we can expand our knowledge of wide range of subjects and deepen our storage by reading a book. we can expand and deepen our knowledge in various fields. Granted, television provides us with information, but, books are not only does it proviede us with a broad range of information, but we can also get focused materails what that we need, because It is possible for us we can to select what we need to read book. For example, encyclopedia shows lots of information and some books by which we study at college have truly profound information. As a result, earning knowledge by television makinges it difficult for us to expand our knowledge, to that an extent, to that fulfills our desire. It is because that television usually shows us general information. Therefore, we can get a lot of information and deepen our knowledge by reading a book.
Moreover, we can easily choose the book which contents good resources. I think that most television programs that are usually running are violent and meaningless. For example, the Seoul National University in Korea has shown a study on how many useless programs are running. According to the study, there are well over seventy percent of meaningless programs, such as variety shows and celebrities' life watched for merely amusement. As you know, it is not easy for us to ignore the fun program when it is shown to us. Therefore, we can get much better information by reading books, because most people select good books.
In conclusion, I consider that printed books have provided us with much more good resources. If we read a book, we can get lots of useful information and broaden our knowledges. Additionally, we don't have to worry about spending time watching useless television shows. Regardless of what others say, I think it is about time that we should spend more time to read a book. The more people realize this, the better the society will become.
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1. 문장이 간결하지 않고 좀 복잡하게 쓰여진 경향이 있네요~
2. 바디1,2가 내용이 좀 이어진다고 해야할까요? 명확히 구분이 안가요 ;ㅅ;
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