Some ppl prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends of the time. Do u prefer to spend ur time alone or w/ friends? use specific reasons to support ur answers~ 시험이 요번 일요일인데.. 한번 공부 안하구 이제 시작했네여. 그냥 17만원 날리는 식으로 한번 써보긴 했는데 ㅋㅋ 그랴두 한번 봐주시면 5일동안 열공하겠습니다~~ |
Just like other teenage high school students, it is really hard for us to spend time together as friends. That’s why it is hard make lot of friends even people are in school.( 글쎄요. 이글에 찬성을할 사람은 별로 없는거 같은데요. 이런 주장을 하실땐 근거가 매우 강해야 합니다. ) Of course teens have time at school being together, but most of activities are limited by school rules and short break time each period. 서론에 자신의 주장을 좀더 적확하게 표현해 주세요. 주장이 뭔지 잘 모르겠어요
I prefer having time with my friends. Because of having friends and keep good relation with them are very important part of our life. >> 문장이 잘 정리가 안되어 있는거 같아요. 앞 문장의 이유를 쓰시려고 한거 같아요. 그럼 That's becuase making friends and geting along with them are very important parts of our life. 로 쓰시면 될듯) But, as it was told at the (전치사 필요)beginning, living through a busy life and not having a lot of free time tend to reduce the time spending >> to spend with friends. And it is true to say that friendships are not just made in one day and it requires long time spending together and bonds by helping each other, having fun, and understanding each other. Since I spend most of time studying a lone, I believe that being with friends helps me by reducing >> to reduce or 그냥 reduce 동사로 release 도 좋습니다. stresses from hard school work and helps me out when there is no way to keep myself studying.
In addition to that, I do a lot of fun things with my friends that help me staying healthy and culturally. We play sports like soccer, basketballs , and(생략) other sports together, and watch movies 열거 하실땐 and 는 마지막으로 ). Sometimes we make time to go to places like museum or library that can be really bored alone. When we do lot of things together, it not only keeps me in good health, but also teach me how to get along with other people. You can not get along with other people by staying home alone and not talking to them. 이미 앞에서 언급된 이유입니다. 첫번째 이유와 두번째 이유가 겹치게 되면 문단을 나누는 의미가 없습니다. 좀더 specific 하게 이유를 2개를 잡으시기 바랍니다. 이유가 겹치면 하나로 합치시고 다른 이유를 하나 쓰시기 바랍니다. )
Lastly, Time spending with friends can be memorable topic to talk as we get old. In our memories, there will be some bad memories such as fighting or, good memories like playing many different sports on same team. I think having talk with my friends about our past time will be very interesting and unforgettable. If I were asked to choose whether spend time alone or being with my friends, I would definitely pick using time with my friends and make great memories that will last forever. |
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