■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preferance.
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There is variety of people who has grown up in different ways. Some people are very independent that they live out their life by their own decisions and desires. Other people are quite vulnerable that they always concern everything based upon other surrounding people's suggestions and advices. Of course, both types of lives have their own advantages and disadvantages. However, as far as I am concerned, I definitely believe that it is better to have ears for listening to other people's advices.
This is due to the fact that it is evident that with the other people's ideas will make more deliberate resultants. Besides, there are a bit of possibility of ruining their lives with making decisions without any strategies.
Obviously, listening to other people's opinion would make their lives easier to live out. Especially, elder people probably know a lot about what the life is from their long-enough experience through out their lives. By having ears for carefully listening to other people's advices and recommendations, they are able to reduce the rate of "trials and errors" which helps them to have perfect straight road through out their lives. To illustrate this point more specifically, I have seen one of my friends who wanted to buy a product from the Internet store. What the problem was that He had not any experience with the online-market systems, and I warned him it are many of possible dangers, especially online store. Finally, he did not listened to me, and he had been deceived by the online seller. This is due to the fact that he was not really concerned about other people's advice even he could avoid that situation by listening to his friend. In this sense, one has to be careful about listening to other people's advices and recommendations.
In addition, it might sound plausible that having their own experience would make them to have their own strategies which properly fit for them. However, it does not have any fundamental basis for their assertion. In fact, it is clear that they will go through a lot of wrong way and come back to right way. This is definitely not efficient way to live out. It costs way more times and efforts to correct their way from wrong direction to right direction. It may also ruin their life because they may not be able to return their life from their wrong decisions. For a simple example, in my country South Korea, high school students are supposed to be divided into two fields, one is Science area, and other is Literature area. I had one friend who was especially good at mathematics. Of course he was good at everything. I had thought he was going to go for the Science area, but he went for the other area. In the senior year, he seems to have seriously hard time with the subject he was taking. Finally, he told me that he made a wrong decision, and he did regret that he should have ask for advice to teachers. As the example indicates the problem of making decisions without other peoples advices dangerous, all of us should ask for advices when the time we are making decisions
To sum up, as I have mentioned, relevant examples tell us that how important it is to listen to other people's advices. I admit that having their own experience probably have their own advantages. However, I believe that paying attention to different opinion and considering those to make good decisions is probably better way to live out this world.
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