일단 244니깐 글자수를 늘이시는게 우선일거 같네용^_^
It is often said that there are more benefits to working for a small company than a large company. This is because small companies have a closer and more intimate feel. However, I firmly believe that it is better to work for a large company thesedays by following two reasons. 서론 topic sentence 1 + topic sentence2개 언급해주시길^^;;
First of all, working at a large company usually guarantees benefits such as using medical facilities. Large companies can provide these benefits because employees get sizeable discounts from the insurance companies. But smaller companies generally can not provide these services because they lack enough money to support workers with expensive health insurance. So If you work for a large company, you can go to see a doctor instantly when you get sick. However if you work at a small company, you could suffer unnecessarily(약간 단어가 좀 안맞는듯^^;;) because you cannot afford the medical cost(그냥간단하게 이렇게 해도 문제가 없을듯이라고 봐용^^;)
-여기서 medical 시설을 사용하는데 있어서 어떤 더 장점이 있는지 구체적으로 정보를 조금더 추가했으면 좋았을거라고봐요. 물론 제 개인적인 생각이지만 짧지만 그냥 님의 의견이 정말 명확하게 잘 전달되서 좋았떤거 같아용 화이팅화이팅!
Another reason is that large companies employ more people than small companies. Working with more people allows you to get more opportunities to make a great variety of friends and encourage you to be more competitive when working with others. Making many friends or competitors from diverse social and economic backgrounds makes life more interesting and no one wants to have a boring work life. Also it makes company more brisk and develop the company.글자수가 부족하시니깐
이런 많은 사람들을 만남으로써 회의에서 share ideas 하고 boraden one's horizon social skills 기르고 그런 내용을 언급해주시는게 좋겠네요.
만약 그렇게 되면 너무 정보가 많아져서 두서가 없어보이고 좀 그래보이니깐 잘 organize하게 써보시길^^
그리고 no one wants to work in a boring work place where there are small number of people with limited머시기 이렇게 약간더 살을 붙여주시면 더 괜찮을 듯합니다.
To wrap up, I think working at a large company is more prudent choice than working at a small company because large companies provide medical services more and give people opportunites to make good friends from different backgrounds by employing more.
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