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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Borrowing money from friends damage friendship. | |
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Have you ever heard that a friend abandon her friend because her friend did not lend money? (토플에서는 의문문, 감탄문 과 같은 건 안 쓰는게 좋아요. ) I have never heard that kind of story, but have heard that two friends' relationship ended because a friend did not pay back money. Therefore, borrowing money from friends definitely can destroy friendship for two reasons ; borrowed money makes friends stop talking and lose trust between two friends.
First of all. friends will hardly talk joyfully as long as a friend pays back to her friends. For example, I lent some money when my friend and I bought a present for our friend. However, my friend did not call me for a long time although we talked at least twice a week before I lent money. For one month, I thought she might not have enough money so far and waited for her calls. Yet, as time goes by, I assumed that she did not want to pay back. Although I felt bad, I still could not call her, because I did not want to confront the awkward conversation with one of my close friend.
Secondly, people become distrustful towards their friends after they help their friends financially and experience friends' not paying back the money on the exact time. Lending money is rooted on strong friendship. However, when people are disgusted by their friends one time, it is hard to regain deep friendship. People would recognize friends' annoying habit that were covered with friends' good personalities. Besides the worst thing is that once seeing friends' misbehavior, people would be disappointed more and more. Consequently, friendship will be ruined.
I do not want to lose any of my cool friends. Thus, I never lend money to my friends because I can look on my friends with jaundiced eyes. I suggest people should not help their friends financially, and would rather find alternative way to solve problems, unless you want to end friendship.(이 부분은 빼주시는게 좋을것같아요. 자기 주장을 내세우는 표현이긴 하지만, 꼭 강요하는 표현 같아요.) |
안녕하세요 KFLHS입니다 ^^
하하 ^^ 첫 시험을 보셨다구요?
첫시험 보셨는데 에세이를 잘 쓰셨네요.
님은 토플 에세이말고 다른 에세이를 많이 써보셨을것 같아요.
저도 처음에 토플 에세이를 다른 경시대회같은데 나갈때 쓰는 에세이 처럼 썼거든요.
하지만 기억하셔야되요 : 경시대회와 토플에서 보는 에세이 시험은 완.전.히 다르다는거.
토플에서는 의문문, 감탄문을 안쓰는게 좋아요.
또, 토플에세이는 모든 사람들이 동의할 수 있는, 알아 들을 수 있는 그런 내용을 담고 있어야합니다.
님은 서론부분에서 I have never heard that kind of story라고 쓰셨잖아요,
그리고 결론에서도 I do not want to lose any of my cool friends라고 하셨구요.
이건 너무 주관적이여서 토플에서는 많이 안 쓰는게 좋아요.
제가 시간이 많지가 않아서 꼼꼼하게는 못 봐드렸어요.
첫시험 치고는 잘 하신것 같아요 ^^
음... 300자 넘으면 절대 좋은 점수 못 받는다구요???
절.대 아니에요 ㅋㅋ
독립형에세이는 250자 이상이에요. 통합형은 150자 이상이구요.
저도 토플 에세이 쓸때 보통 280자~300자 사이에 쓰는데요.
시험 볼때 너무 많이 쓰게 되면, 다 쓰고나서 처음부터 끝까지 훑어볼수 있는 시간이 줄어들어요.
두번째 시험을 칠때까지 에세이 많이 올리세요, 제가 될수 있으면 봐드릴게요. ㅎㅎ
열심히 하세요 ^^
이상 KFLHS였습니다.
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