▶ Your Answer : The lecturer explains that being connected conncected through social media is not harmful to people while the reading passage supports the opposite position.
First, the speaker says that it is simply possible to prevent inappropriate unappropriate posting from being uploaded uploading on the social space by a program that simple to fix it. Also, school and parents can teach them them으로 지칭할 대상이 아직 나오지 않았으니 키워드를 밝혀서 써주세요. how to use it right way. This refutes the reading passage that as the internet doesn't have a strict regulation, people are likely to upload whatever they want.
Second, the speaker says that it is a natural response to have social comparisons when people they see highly visible events. In this situation, they are apt to feel less satisfied with their own lives but he argues that this feeling is natural and even healthy. Also, this reactions is can happen not only happend in social media but also happend in every day lives and this, which is common problems. This rebuts the reading passage that a very positive events are able to result in stark social comparisons through the social network leaves leaving viewers feeling less satisfied.
Third, the lecturer says that we don't have to get popular attention by all viewers in social media. Although he agrees with the fact that social media posts are able to be ignored by viewers, but it is not important because the purpose of posting is showing one's shows your life to a few friends, not to the whole world. This offers the a counterpoint to the argument mentioned in the reading that getting seeing very little reaction to theri posting in social socil media may cause leave them people to feel feeling that their life was is not noteworthy.
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Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections. |